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mooxy
Psychic Trainer
Joined: Sun Aug 27, 2006 12:50 pm Posts: 92 Location: Looks like I'm gonna crash land on Planet Earth! Uh-oh! 99999999999 Psybucks
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Welcome to the strangest pokemon adventure of all time. Enjoy!
Chapter 1: The fools awake
"Come on, crazy fools, get up already! That crazy professor's waitin' for ya!" Mr. T shouted up the stairs.
Sorry this is taking so long, I'm using a PS3 to type. I'll do some more when I get home.
_________________I am a... Er... Mooxy fan! The story of Kecleon! viewtopic.php?t=12853=D
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Wed Jul 30, 2008 5:46 am |
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Valentine
Pokemon Master
Joined: Thu Jun 15, 2006 4:59 pm Posts: 2399 Location: feel the mambo
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As soon as I saw 'Mr. T,' I hit the back button.
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Wed Jul 30, 2008 9:40 am |
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Archangel Mikael
Ace Trainer
Joined: Wed Jul 16, 2008 11:43 am Posts: 266 Location: under your keyboard, smiling at all the dust mites....
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dude, no offense but this is going to go no where. 0/10 anything Pokémon that has Mr.t will defiantly NOT mix
_________________A flea and fly in a flue, Were imprisoned so what could they do? Said the flea let us fly. Said the fly let us flee. So they flew through a flaw in the flue.
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Wed Jul 30, 2008 11:27 am |
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dunsparce
Pokemon Master
Joined: Tue Jun 19, 2007 11:24 am Posts: 1152 Location: IN THE EMOTIONLESS TRAWLING FERVOR'S OF MY INSANE MIND.
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We've had something like this before, it was not received well. People will probably get very angry at you if you continue. My advice: stop.
EDIT: Following two posts eliminates "probably".
_________________^DarkCosmos, Poems^
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Wed Jul 30, 2008 12:55 pm |
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2x4b
Pokemon Master
Joined: Sun Apr 10, 2005 9:55 am Posts: 1456 Location: Stafford, UK
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For this atrocity, in my eyes you cannot die soon or violently enough. This may seem harsh and I don't want to come over as cruel but unfortunately that's what I am.
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Wed Jul 30, 2008 2:47 pm |
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Archangel Mikael
Ace Trainer
Joined: Wed Jul 16, 2008 11:43 am Posts: 266 Location: under your keyboard, smiling at all the dust mites....
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you should rename it ''the extremely repulsive uninteresting adventures (it's retarded)
seriously
_________________A flea and fly in a flue, Were imprisoned so what could they do? Said the flea let us fly. Said the fly let us flee. So they flew through a flaw in the flue.
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Wed Jul 30, 2008 2:53 pm |
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Psyches
Ace Trainer
Joined: Wed Feb 15, 2006 10:48 pm Posts: 359 Location: Australia
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Go read the adventures of totodile.
chrast.
_________________ "If I'm flying solo at least I'm flying free,"
www.youtube.com/ThePlastikOne
www.youtube.com/PsychesEntertainment
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Thu Jul 31, 2008 5:48 pm |
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Crimson
Pokemon Ranger
Joined: Sun May 07, 2006 2:33 pm Posts: 716 Location: USA EST
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1) Don't use a PS3 to type if all you can manage is a sentence or so.
2) Read: books. Learn what "good" fiction is. Don't get me wrong, I've read stuff that I think is horribly written, but it's a start.
3) Comedy is one of the hardest genres to write. Writing random crap isn't going to make it funny or good.
4) Practice makes perfect. Take a step away from "comedy" and practice writing short stories: drabbles, one-shots, etc.
_________________Link changed to my library.
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Fri Aug 01, 2008 12:52 pm |
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Archangel Mikael
Ace Trainer
Joined: Wed Jul 16, 2008 11:43 am Posts: 266 Location: under your keyboard, smiling at all the dust mites....
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example: I am writing on my PSP at this time and I learned after multiple posts that it gets quite anoying. Here is an example of how much room your ps3 allows 123456789 123456789 123456789 123456789 123456789 123456789 123456789 123456789 123456789 123456789 123456789 123456789 123456789 123456789 123456789 123456789 123456789 123456789 123456789 123456789 123456789 123456789 123456789 123456789 123456789 123456789 123456789 987456321 123654789 987456321 123654789 987456321 123654789 987456321 123654789 1
_________________A flea and fly in a flue, Were imprisoned so what could they do? Said the flea let us fly. Said the fly let us flee. So they flew through a flaw in the flue.
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