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This plot is about the journey of a smart, curious young boy called "Stanley", now at his 15s he is about to embark on his long-waited Quest, which takes place about 10 years after Ash

After quite a while, I actually learnt how to really write fics. I invite you to read this format 2.0 of all my past works (enphatices on 1-4th chaps)

Resuming our appointment with this story, here you have next installment [V.2.0]

It's good. It's really good. I like it. But it would be easier on my eyes if you used " " instead of - -


I think it's going to turn out great, but the next chapter is always more important the the last.

Thanks, thanks, here we are, enjoying 3rd Chapter!

I like this.

My only advice is to use correct grammar and punctuation.

Well done.

well, I

dude, it's going good. I like the whole creativity of it. Just remember spelling and grammer. not saying that there was any just a reminder. Keep up the good work.


EDIT: maybe a little more time introducing the characters or something before actualy getting into the story line. Look at mine, the action doesn't start until a little bit after all nthe characters have been introduced (this may be hard for you, for not all your characters are introduced yet but still.)

Hee, like I promised AM I read and now I'll review.

I'm seeing a lot of the same issues in each thing chapter. For one thing...grammar and spelling seem to be huge issues. In dialogue you can sort of get away with this, because depending on how you write it you can give that person a dialect. And I'm serious about grammar, at one point you called Stanley a girl.

When you wish to introduce a person you use an apposotive. An apposotive can be used with comas or without them.

Helpfyl hints on spelling.
1) write up your story on a word document.

2) use spell check on the document

3) get a friend or family member to read it over for you.

4) when all mistakes are fixed, copy and paste it onto your thread.

5) BEFORE submitting it use the PREVIEW button to overlook it one last time.

6) if everything is absolutly ok than post it.


if you follow these correctly you are almost certain to have a good story........ almost.

<font color="999999">Hiya guys!

I must thank you all for the good feedback, I felt kinda better when you wrote some advices for me, I will practice grammar, u know; I already write the story in a Word document and I just don

<font color="999999">Psypoke-surfing people! I now bring you the 5Th. chapter of the STORY!
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<font color="FF3333"> Chapter #5: Unown Address.</font>

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I think you need way more discription, in all the parts of your book. Beleive it or not it could be fun to duscribe. Try telling us at the begging what he's wearing and the bag he has instead if discribing it every time he uses it or something. Also, discribe the cities. For me, scene moments are really fun. I love them and they love me.... I think. It alows me to really show what I'm made of and intriduce you more into my world. That is the big thing about books. Discription.


EDIT: Ok, your edits are good, but they could be better. Back when you started it certan mistakes were OK to leave, but when the story goes on and starts to unfold you may want to cleab it up. Another thing, If this is it than you rushed alot of it up. What was this proficy thing you mentioned in the beggining? you need to build that MORE into your story.

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<font color="999999">I think I could REALLY write up my story a little bit (okay, MUCH) better, but I agree with you all, and I

mhm ...mhmm ...MHMM ...Yay! I like this!!! , the history, the characters, the......everything!...

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Hee, shhhh AAMB *pats head* I realize that English is your second language. Heck, it's my first and I still have issues with it...I'm 16.

Yes you may ask me for help, I'm more than willing to. Believe it or not I am being patient, normally I wouldn't take the time to reread something to see the author's changes. I'm just lazy. XD

I don't really mind you using my sentences, I just worry about you becoming dependent on them. It's easy to become dependent on things like that. Using them as references to see how words can be strung together to be more comprehensive is totally different though.

I don't want you to think that you should stop writing, you'll never ever hear me say that. You will on a occasion hear me ranting about people who refuse to take critisism so they can learn and grow, thankfully you're not one of them, but I will never say for someone to stop doing something.

I give you so much credit for just writing a story in English, I'm always in awe of people who's first language isn't English yet they write a story in English. I had trouble with Spanish, not memorization just writing and comprehending, I can't even imagine how well of a handle people like you must have on it to even make a story that a reader can follow along with well enough.

<font color="999999">Weeh! someone REALLY liked the story; and you even dedicated your very first post to my story! I feel so...good! *tear*

btw, yeah "Gust" I

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<font color="999999">Ok, this Chapter is finished, as I see, you guys like this, so I

It's good, again. I do have to admit though, I didn't have time to finish it. I will later. but again, I'd like to see this "prophecy" thing come more into play. I know you probubly want this to unfold a bit before hand but, still. Don't forget your actualy plot line, dude.

Your doing well. I give alot of credit for doing so well, writing this in english and all.