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Chapter 1 Mew
A bright light filled the sky. It was the solar eclipse. All of a sudden Mew awoke from sleeping. It looked at the sun shut its eyes and when they opened they were red.
It remembered the saddest and angriest moment of its life, when Mewtwo cloned pokemon and tryed to use them to take over the world. Mewtwo called Mew weak for not wanting to fight.
"Mewtwo called me weak", thought Mew. "I'll show Mewtwo weak", said Mew its teeth clenched and eyes full of hate.
Mew quickley flew off towards outerspace where Mewtwo had taken its army of clones.




I know its quite short but after a while i will post chapter 2. Just give me your honest oppinion and rate my chapter. Make it a #/10.
P.s dont worry the chapters will get longer.
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Chapter 2 Mewtwo
Mewtwo was in outerspace. It was using its psychic powers to make stormclouds overhead to protect it from the eclipse. Mewtwo knew what the solar eclipse did to legendary pokemon.
"These storm clouds should protect me", said Mewtwo. "I just fear for the world, today will bring mass destruction, and harm to inocent people and pokemon".
Mewtwo sat and thought for a while.
"Should I warn the humans, and leave my clones here?"
"Or should i stay and protect them?"
Just that moment his Blastiose, Charizard, and Venasaur came up to it. They looked in Mewtwos eyes with eyes full of honor and trust.
"So be it, you three will take the clones to a safe place and watch over them forever", said Mewtwo
"GO!!!"
With that the three brave pokemon took the others to a safe faraway place. That was the last time Mewtwo ever saw them.
Then Mewtwo flew off to Earth to warn the pokemon and the people. But then he had a vision. With horror struck eyes Mewtwo turned around and went back to Saturn and waited for what was yet to come.


What did Mewtwo see in its vision? What is the mass destruction and harm Mewtwo was talking about? Give me a rating and ill give you some answers.
Well how do you like it now? Give me a rating (#/10) And ill give you another chapter or two.


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Fri Jul 22, 2005 9:07 am
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well firefpowell i guess its ok. i never really pictured mew as a revenge kind of pokemon....but its kind of cool. but the text on the second chapter needs to be a different color-i had to highlight it with my mouse to read it. i dont really understand but you said honest opinion so 4/10. im sorry

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no its ok thanks for your oppinion :D and the color thing i did pinkish for Mew cause Mew is pinkish.
And purple 4 Mew2 cause Mew2 is like purpleish but ill change the color
Btw Mew being revenge like will be explained dont worry.


Chapter 3 Articuno, Zapdos, Moltres
In Kanto the three legendary bird pokemon were blinded for a few seconds. The solar eclipse was extremley bright especially in the sky.
When the three pokemon recovered their eyes were brick red. The three did not fight each other in stead they flew off in different directions.
Articuno flew off towards the Seafoam islands. When it got there it used ice beam over and over til' the islands were completley coverd by a thick layer of ice. Even then it still used ice beam til' the sea started to freeze.
Zapdos was on its way to Celadon city. When it got there it started to create a huge storm cloud untill the whole sky above Kanto was covered in a pitch black storm cloud. Then it used Thunder over and over til' the thunder storm started.
Moltres flew to Cinnabar island. It used FireBlast until the island was almost completley on fire. Then it caused the volcano to go off.
Lava flew everywhere.
Kanto was doomed.


Whats going on with thle legendary pokemon? Is there hope for Kanto?
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This is alright.7 1/2 out of 10. I wanna see what happens next.

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Chapter 4 Lugia and Ho-oh
All of a sudden the water in Johto got very hot. The eclipse made its way to Johto. Both the whirlpool islands and the tin tower became very warm and bright waking the two great and powerfull Lugia and Ho-oh.
The whirlpool islands started to shake. Lugia emerged from the island, eyes red. It went in the sea to cool off but suddenly became quite angry. So it made a huge whirlpool and a 50 foot tall tidal wave. Cinawood and Olivine were right in the middle of these two disasters.
Ho-oh awoke looked at the sun blinked and suddenly its eyes turned red. It flapped its winds vigorosley. Then flew up into the sky and started to smash the tin tower. Then Ho-oh set it on fire. It continued untill' the tin tower was nothing but rubble.


Will Olivine and Cinawood be okay? What is this solar eclipse doing to these poor pokemon?(dont worry couple more chapters and you will find out :wink: )
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Id give you a good ol 8!!

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Chapter 5 Kyogre and Groudon

Kyogre stirred in its sleep. Then awoke with red eyes. It was angered for some reason. So the more it got angry the more it rained. First it was a sprinkle. Then to a shower. Then the rain came down hard. Soon it was a thunderstorm, then a flood. Then the storm turned into a hurricane a very destructive hurricane.
Groudon awoke very angry from its sleep. Its eyes were red. Then it thought of something something that made it angry. The angrier it got the hotter the sun got outside. Soon it was too hot to go out side and at least 97 degrese inside any shelter in Hoenn. After a while the hot weather and the huge hurricane were slowly deystroying Hoenn.

Chapter 6 Rayquaza
All of a sudden the sky pillar became quite hot. Then the wind blew the roof right off the pillar. Rayquaza awoke with red eyes. It roared out of anger. The roar was so loud that you could hear it over the 95 mile per hour wind. It flew into the air. The scolding temperature and huge hurricane didnt bother Rayquaza because it was so angry. Rayquaza flew to every town in Hoenn and started a tornado.

Looks like Hoenn might be doomed? Will Hoenn survive?
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Quiet good i'll give it 6.9/10.


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alright now you'll get some answers :D
Chapter 7 Professor Mayple

Professor Mayple was in her lab in Johto on Mt Silver. She quicly paced back and forth across the room.
"Where are they? They better get here soon. I hope they dont get caught in storms" said Professor Mayple.
"Professor Mayple they sent a message" said one of Mayple's aids.
"Good let me see it Ben"
"Follow me Professor"
They walked into a room full of chairs, a few tables, a vending machine with food and drinkks, and some phones. This was the lobby where the researchers took their brakes.In the corner of the room a picture phone was on hold.
"Right here Professor" said Ben
"Thanks, now go do research on the storms"
Professor Mayple pushed a button on the phone, Pokemon Champions Lance, Steven, and Red were on the screen.
"Hello Professor" , said Steven.
"Did you talk to Professor Oak, Elm, and Birch?"
"Yes we did" said the Champions together.
"What did they say?"
"Oak said that it was only a legend that every 100 years on the solar eclipse the legendary pokemon became angered." said Red.
"Elm said that the pokemon wouldn't stop until the gaurdians stopped them....then we lost power before we could ask who the guardians were."said Lance
"Birch said that the bright sun turned thier eyes red he didnt know anything else." said Steven.
"Well , said Professoe Mayple they're all right but i know one thing that they dont.
"What? said Lance eagerly.
"The gaurdians are.......chshhhhhhh....were losing power.....they are....Rai..cshhhh kou, Entei, cshhh,.. and Suicune." said the Professor
"Okay we on our back up power we wont lose power now" said Ben
"Thanks" said Mayple
"Why them?, asked Red.
"Well it's sort of funny ever seen those pokemon? askes the Professor.
"Yes, said Lance what about them?"
"What color are they're eyes? said Mayple.
"Red" said Lance
"Because of their red eyes they arent effected by the eclipse, thats why their eyes are red to stop the madness of the pokemon.But because they were caught by three trainers they cant stop the madness" said Mayple
"So what do we do? asked Steven.
"Ill get the three trainers you must fight the pokemon keep then distracted, Lance you and your Elite 4 fight Lugia and Ho-oh. Steven you and your Elite 4 fight Groudon and Kyogre. Red you and your Elite 4 fight Articuno, Zapdos, and Moltres" said Mayple
"We'll fight em', said Red
"We'll get em for you, said Steven
"We wont let you down" , said Lance



Who are these 3 trainers?
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Sat Jul 23, 2005 4:43 pm
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I like this story. How it all goes together. And I have to say I liked the beginning with Mew and Mewtwo in the outerworld. I'll give it an overall 8/10.

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Thank you SL. Heres your chapter
Chapter 8 The Guardians

The Pokemon champions flew off in the directions of there home region. Professor Mayple dialed a number on the phone. It rang a few times then someone picked up.
"Hello this is Jerry.''
"Jerry it's me Professor Mayple."
"Hello Professor, what do you want?"
As you can see the world is in complete and total chaos."
"Yeah Professor I can see that"
If you can come down to the lab on Mt. Silver."
"OK ill try"
And bring your Suicune"
"OK see ya Professor."
"bye Jerry."
Mayple dialed another number.
"Hello Lucy here."
Hi Lucy it's me Professor Mayple."
"Hi im kinda busy with the storm and all."
"I know thats why I called, do you have your Raikou?"
"Yeah"
"Bring it to the lab on Mt.Sillver, i have to go."
"Okay will do bye."
Mayple then dialed the last number.
"Hello this is Bill."
"Bill i must be quick this is Professor Mayple, bring your Entei to the lab on Mt.Sillver."
"Okay ill be right there."

"There the calls are done" said Mayple.
"Professor?" said Ben.
"What?
"The storms are the worst recorded storms ever recorded in history."
"I just hope that Jerry, Lucy, and Bill make it here safley."

Will the three make it to Mt.Sillver alright?
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AWESOME I LOVE TIS i give it a 9.8/10

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Jerry, Lucy and Bill? *amused smile* Nice plot idea, but something's not quite right about the structure. I think it needs more description, and the pace slowed just a little. Overall, 6.5/10


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firefpowell,could you please don't use the colour dark red,dark blue and green.I know it is important but i don't really like highlighting the story just to read it.

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YAY I CAN POST MORE YAHOoO (ive benn waitin a couple months)
Chapter 9 Jerry
"Go Fearow!", said Jerry.
Fearow then appeared, "Use fly Fearow!"
Jerry hoped on top of Fearows back. Fearow had trouble flying with the 100 mph winds.
"Okay we have to fly to Mt. Silver ok?" Fearow shook its head in agreement.
I hope we'll make it out of kanto thought Jerry as he saw the lightning of the storm.
Chapter 10 Lucy
Okay lets go Tropius! Fly! ,said Lucy.
Tropius was uneasy with the huge winds and horrifyingly hot weather.
Lucy and Tropius still started to fly from Slateport to Mt. Silver.
Lucky and Tropius were dripping with sweat after just a few moments.
"I know its hot Topius but we HAVE to make it to Mt. Silver.
I just hope we CAN make it to Mt. Silver.

Okay will Lucy anf Jerry make it to Mt. Silver? Why havent I made Bills chapter yet? Give me a rating and ill give you an answer.[/i]


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This is brill!!!!

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Chapter 10 Bill
"Go Noctowl! Use FLY!" said Bill.
Noctowl flew up with Bill on his back. "Okay Noctowl fly to Mt. Silver"
Bill was on his way to Mt.Silver from Cinawood.
Crap weve gotta go through Ho-oh and Lugia! thought Bill.


Lugia and Ho-oh were moving their way through ALL of Johto now.
This meant that Bill had to go through the title wave whis is now a hurricane AND a raging fire.

The winds were so bad that Noctowl couldnt fly straight.
"We CAN do this" said Bill , "I hope."
With that Noctowl and Bill put forth 250% going through the hurricane.
They were so tired when Bill was only half consius.
Look the eye of the storm! he said.
When Bill and Noctowl got thier Noctowl calapsed into the sea.
Nooooooooooooooooo!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!, cried Bill


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Brill

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Chapter11 The Fall Of A Hero

Bill was unconsios in the sea. His Noctowl was unconsius too.
Luckily the current pulled them onto one of the whirlpool islands. But they didnt have long the eye of the storm was passing over them.

Lucy and Jery made it to Mt.Silver.
"Thank God you two made it." said Professor Mayple with a sigh of relef.
"But what happend to Bill he should have been here before the 2 of you he closer." , she said.
"I dont know what happend to him but I just hope hes ok" , said Lucy.
"Ditto" said Jerry
Then the phone rang.
Prof. Mayple answered it.
"Hello" Her face then looked as if had turned to stone.
Okay then bye". said Prof Mayple
"Jerry, Lucy Lance found Bill,... hes...hes...dead."
Jerry and Lucy looked with shocked and sad faces.
But Lugia and Ho-oh are starting to get under control.
"Professor you should see this" said a researcher.
"I cant now"
"But Mayple it looks like Mew and Mewtwo are coming towards earth."


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its gettin better and bettter

9.5/10


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Chapter 12 The Return of the Mews

Mew was headed straight for Johto. Mewtwo was right behind Mew.
Mew started to attack Lugia and Ho-oh. Mewtwo battled with Mew to try to calm it down.


Prof. Mayple was standing in awe.
"That's not good at ALL.''
Then all of a sudden Entei got transported to Prof. Mayples lab.
"What the..." said Mayple The pokeball had a message written on it.
We thought you needed it,
Lance

"Well Lucy Jerry lets stop this madness. What you have to do is take Suicune Raikou and Entei to Mewtwo who is currently here in Johto. Then Mewtwo will handle the rest. Got That?"
"Yep lets go!, said Jerry.
"Yeah" ,agreed Lucy


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Hurry up and tell me more *sits on chair yelling at computer*

9/10


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Hmmm... what should I give it...
I know! A 10/10! No really it's a {starmie}{starmie}{starmie}{starmie}{starmie}{starmie}{starmie}{starmie}{starmie}{starmie}/{starmie}{starmie}{starmie}{starmie}{starmie}{starmie}{starmie}{starmie}{starmie}{starmie} :P

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WOW :o Thanks Guys
Chapter 13 Elite Four
Lance and the other Johto Elites were battling Lugia and Ho-oh.
Then Lucy and Jerry came. By then Mew had already begun fighting the elites. Mewtwo was defending the Elites though.
''Go Entei Raikou and Suicune!" said Lucy and Jerry together.
Mewtwo looked surprised. THE 3 LENENDARY DOGS!!!!!
Mew saw the dogs and ran.
Mewtwo saw the dogs and its eyes glowed red. The dogs did the same when they saw Mewtwo.
Then a psychic wave was caried from Mewtwo and the dogs then Lugia and Ho-oh calmed down/ But the two were so fatigued that they fainted.
"Wow thanks alot you two" , said Lance. "You might have saved the world".
"Well Johto anyways. We still have to save Hoenn and Kanto." said Jerry.
"Well good luck, but im concernd about Mew it seems like it doesnt want to be calmed down the way it ran before." said Lance
"Well, were gonna calm it down no mater what", said Lucy.

The seas calmed in Johto and the fire was put out by the hurricaine. Johto was safe for now.


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Swampert King wrote:
Hmmm... what should I give it...
I know! A 10/10! No really it's a {starmie}{starmie}{starmie}{starmie}{starmie}{starmie}{starmie}{starmie}{starmie}{starmie}/{starmie}{starmie}{starmie}{starmie}{starmie}{starmie}{starmie}{starmie}{starmie}{starmie} :P

Pure repeat... Pure repeat...
I bet that the Regis help Hoenn...

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