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Hey, im thinking of making a fanfiction story, but im not sure how to start. For now though i need your opinion of how this is at least. Ill be thinking of the story once i get the titles and the profiles of the main characters up and proper.


Unlikely Heros
Rated: PG 13


In a world where chaos and destruction always follows, hero’s rise up to save the day- or can they?
Seriously can they? The supposed to be heros are more like zeros- all four of them. Two of them cant get along with each other, one is rather stupid and takes unnecessary risks, and one is more of the kind that would rather be better off staying in his hole. Oh well, might as well introduce them.

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Hero 1: Zagna Dragon Lover

{zangoose}

Personality: Hes the “stupid” one of the team, but surprisingly the leader. He takes risks that aren’t needed in order to get the job done. He maybe kind and has a good sense of justice, it doesn’t make up for the fact that hes out of his league. He even views his worst enemys as his best friend for crying out loud!

Hero 2: Draken

{seviper}

Personality: Hes the one that would be better off in a hole. Having amnesia for quite some time it makes him rather blank when it comes to emotions. He maybe a good fighter but unfortunately his struggle to remember his past tends to get him in the way.

Hero 3: Jannany

{flareon}

Personality: Shes one of the characters that cant get along with the other. She obsessed with red and loves seeing it. Her temper can be something to watch out for big time, but otherwise is a little naïve.

Hero 4: Strakni

{ninjask}

Personality: Let me put it this way, hes completely neutral. He knows how to show emotions, he just doesn’t want to show it. His attitude though gets him burned by Jannany a lot. In fact, hes one of Zagnas “friends” that wants to kill him but cant somehow. He swore to not stop following him until he has him dead for stopping his plans so many times in the past when the two didn’t even know each other. But until then, hes trying to keep him alive so he can kill him himself.

If im not supposed to post stuff like this here or ask for ratings here, just let me know and ill delete it.

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Well...it would be nice if you knew what you were writing about before trying to set your characters in stone, but some people are able to start writing with just a character so have at it. Aside from that...I may be wrong, but your heroes' names sound like usernames, or at least the first one is (seeing how it is your username). That is typically discouraged because the writer is tempted to try to make their character more appealing to the audience than others. Not to mention, having characters based off of others in real life can end messily. Usually that's because you, either unintentionally or intentionally, portray the person/character in a way that they do not want.

When you're writing, you don't need to add extra exclamation points. It's very amateur-ish and unnecessary. We get the hint with one, three is overkill. I'll be looking forward to what you come up with. Good luck!

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Sorry, none of them are actually usernames (except Zagna, but i made the name and the character before even deciding to use it as a username.) They are all characters i made up a long time ago, about five years ago. I plan on putting them into reality (though not a pokemon) in a game or in a story book. Im just experamenting with as to what suituations they can get into with just one of their attitudes or maybe even all of them.

Basicly the setting is that Zagna and Draken has just beaten up another trainer and his pokemon for trying to capture them, the others just waiting on the side lines with anticipation. Strakni goes on saying of how he could have done better when he has tried to help the trainer beat them actually. But because of that, Jannany burnt him to a crisp, threatening to give him a good mauling.

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Hey.
I have been thinking of posting something new for quite a while. After a bit of writing for my Twilght Fic (which HOPEFULLY should be locked soon), and some constructive comments from 2x4b (who is a little scary), I feel ready to write something else.
The problem is, whenever I write my stories down, I get this feeling that the ideas stop flowing and that I just can't finish it.
I will give it a try.

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Well... something I would start with is making sure you have a story that's yours, with as little outside influence as possible, and the characters are yours, based off as few people as possible. Now, try to get some sort of outline with as many helpful things for you in it before you start writing. Try to visualize where your story's going and how you'll start off and get there. EVERY successful story has forshadowing, which is a small helpful way of setting a mood or making certain important facts known before you get a few lines away from where their important.

One thing to remember is try to not get discouraged, and keep on writing. It's tough for me, but I got through an entire book and almost it's sequal and it's tough, but I tried not to get discouraged. Now, Fan Fic like the one your writing now IS harder because you have series accuracy, character accuracy, you have less freedom, your judged by other fans, it just get's harder.


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I've started writing my fanfic and I plan to start posting early to mid June, depending on how much I get done between now and then. Here's a mini-summary to hopefully give a proper preview of the story, titled "Eyes", without giving too much of the plot away:

In the year 21XX, civilization as we know it has been driven under the sea as the ozone layer has diminished to dangerous levels. Human and animal populations now live in glass dome sectors governed individually by their main city. 11-year-old Jack Soren wanted only to lead an easy life free of worry and hard work. When the world of Pokemon training he had given up on calls for him again, the peace and balance between the people of the new Johto region and the three Dieties; Suicune, Entei, and Raikou; wavers.


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It sounds decent enough but here's just something to think about when you're making a summary (not that I'm any good at them). You never mentioned the Dieties before and that leaves people asking what they are and if they somehow missed something while they were reading.. In a summary, you need to give enough informtion that they're interested, not confused.

The only other thing that bothered me, personally, is that he's 11 years-old. Don't get me wrong, he can be 11, but the way you worded the rest of it made me kind of balk at the entire story. You make it sound like he was a pokemon trainer for a long time, but he's only 11. Unless he was a trainer since he could walk, I don't think the way you worded the last sentence works. It'd work better if he were older. If you said something like he had stopped actively training but outside circumstances forced him to abandon his schoolwork (a viable reason for someone so young), then I probably wouldn't have balked at it. That's not to say that it doesn't actually work in your story; since I haven't read it, I don't know. That's just the impression that the summary gave me.

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I wanted to keep the Deities a mystery until the readers find out in the fic, but now that I think about it, I can't think of a reason why I did that. I don't know if they were ever called Deities in the game or anime, but why I called them that will be explained in the fic. I editted them in, either way. As for the confusion about the character's age and history, he gave up pretty much right away, so it's been a year since he had received his Pokemon. Was "once again" a bad choice of words, perhaps? I'll take out "once". Otherwise, I don't know how I could fix that. Any suggestions?


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For discussion at hand: either change his age so he's older or just say "Now he's pulled into the world of training that he desperatly tried to escape" or something like that. Don't use that word-for-word, morph it to your story, of coarse.


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Ok, i have a fan fiction thats better than the last one. But im afraid that i might be just wasting my time as well as others by doing this so i want your opinions on it first to be safe.

After all the failures that Giovanni had to put up with. From creating a Mewtwo that had a mind of its own to trying to failed captures pokemon using team rocket, he had enough of the same thing happening all the time. He decided to make a pokemon by fusing two existing ones into one with great power, one that would even make Mewtwo fall before him. He choose these two pokemon for good reasons. He choose Umbreon because of the fact that its the most durable pokemon thats a dark type, even able to take a couple of blows against pokemon that its weak against. His second pokemon that he choose to fuse was a Spiritomb because of its great power as well as the fact that it has no weakness. The two manage to escape, but at a cost. The machine fused Spiritomb to Umbreons shadow as well as give them the ability to talk english as well as their own language, so they are stuck together until they find a way to separate. After a little traveling (and constant arguments of directions to go) they find a village and a guy who has dreams of having a pokemon adventure. The guy promises to help them and they all set out on a journey to find a way to stop Giovanni from making another abomination like the way that the two almost did as well as free the two pokemon.

{umbreon} Umbreon
Personality: Hes the type of pokemon that stays calm under most situations. He cares about others but knows when to carea bout himself. When hes stuck with Spiritomb though, his patience will be put to the test.

{spiritomb} Spiritomb
Personality: He holds a grudge on Giovanni for all those experiments that was put on him. He will have a tendacy to loose his cool once he notices that hes attached to Umbreon as his life-source. Hes selfish and likes to bring misery to others. His intention however, despite making it seem like he wants to be separated from Umbreon actually wants to finish fusing with him, completing the transformation- yet with his own mind still. What does he have in store once he accomplishes that?

Rijed
appearance: Hes rather thin with simple black hair. He wears a blue shirt with black long pants. He also wears glasses.
personality: Hes a caring guy who craves for adventure. He perfers to take situations strategicly over just charging head on. Though that might take a couple of minutes for him to fomulate a plan that might work.

What do you think? Im just putting down the plot so you know what happens in it, im going to do some changes when start posting it up. If its not really good then im sorry. I never get good at fan fiction for some reason.

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Zanga: to be honest, the idea of fusing two pokémon together seems a bit crazy in my opinion. perhaps the two could be part of testing to create an extremely durable pokémon, but there should be more than two experimental pokémon, but allow only your two characters to escape. I think the idea has potential, and could be a humorous fanfic.

Others: I have a bit of a dilemma... I have a story idea, but I fear it may be too violent, but at the same time, the violence is needed to set the stage of why this guy is so depressed...

the plot: Reft is a severely depressed son of an alcoholic. Reft lives with his dad and his two older brothers, Isaac and Nikolas. Reft's mom committed suicide, and his dad was a rocket executive, until the team declined after Giovanni's leave. Reft spends his time daydreaming while his father is away, until one day he notices a Persian hiding her kittens in an old cardboard box. Reft dreams of running away from his abusive dad. One day Reft notices a Raticate has attacked the kittens after his brother Niko killed the mother Persian with his Sandslash for "practice." Reft walks outside a few days later dumping the trash to find that one of the kittens survived, and thus he runs from his abusive father (with the Meowth), and is forced to steal from houses to survive. After years of being on his own Reft returns to seek revenge on his father.
(Niko is the spitting image of the dad (Felix), Isaac is the oldest and nice brother)

Problem: In the first chapter I have Reft cleaning up his own blood (busted lip and nose) after his father returns home drunk... again. My problem is that I want to have a realistic (and dark) story but I don't want to have a bunch of admins hunting me down with a ban stamp to slap on my forehead... could i say T and walk away, or do I need to have a higher rating? and if so... the rules said that M was forbidden...

and by the way, does the plot sound good? (sorry for the long plot. I really should have shortened it)

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I say you have a good plot there, but you do have a right to be concerned. From the way that you describe it alone despite that its not the actual story, i think ou should definetely put up one of those age ratings to warn the readers that its not for kids at least so then they know to steer away from it. Its their own problem then if they dont heed your warning. But as for the admins concern, i dont blame you if you're worried. You can make it violent, but maybe you can lower the violence and blood just a little bit and you should be fine.

Otherwise its an excellent story and i look forward to it. Just make sure to add that age rating up.
For example, based on what you describe, what should be the minimal age requirements to you?

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I've written a One-Shot fic that was meant to be for Halloween. This is a brief summary, rating, character details, etc.

Formido
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Genre: Horror
Plot Summary: Ray, a pokemon trainer, is in Eterna Forest when a violent storm starts. So she (yes, I said 'she') seeks shelter in the Old Chateau. It's just what ensues from there.
Author's Comments: Well, I feel the horror themes in this are very corny, but it was meant to be posted on Halloween but it got delayed. It's also got weird stuff which may make people think 'What the Hell?' Not the best fic I've written but I don't think it's too bad.
Characters: One Major character is used for this. This is my in-game persona, Ray. She is eighteen, currently living in an partment in Hearthome with her 'butler' Jeeves (a Shiny Hypno that she caught when he tried to 'assault' her. Ray's 'daughter,' Lucy (actually her Lucario she raised from an egg who refers to her as 'Mother') said that Jeeves should be a butler to Ray as compensation for what he tried to do. Her mother is currently travelling around the World, explaining why Ray has her Pokemon. She has a few Pokemon, the only one used in the one-shot, Formido, is an Absol she named Siren to cut a tree down. There's not much description of her apparence because I was trying to focus more on what is going on in the Old Chateau.
Title Explanation: Formido is Latin for the word 'Fear'

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kind of fanfic-ish? a pokemon parody of kesha's tik tok :D

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Wow... I hope I;m not necromancing.
I wanted to know if non-Pokemon FFs were allowed here, and I have a FF that I've been thinking about since the beginning of my RP, the Zerg-Pokemon Invasion.
The non-Pokemon one is a Warriors FF called the Rise of SkullClan, and the other one's called... the Zerg-Pokemon Invasion Chronicles.
Can someone tell me please?


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Hey, everyone. How's your day been? Good? Hopefully. Now, I would like to ask if anyone else here likes reading/writing Ship-Specific fanfics? Let me know. Message me if you would like to talk about shippings. Thanks!

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