First of all, this is my first FF. Please try to be nice, and use "constructive criticism". However I do not mind if you do criticize me. I'll take it graciously, promise.
Some things you should know: Keaton is an elf, and here is a little description of what elves are like (in my opinion):
There are 3 types of elf: Blood elf, Dark elf, and forest elf. (Keaton is a forest elf.)
Forest elves are immortal, first of all. Secondly, they are flawless., in looks, personality and other things. Elves are positively, irresistibly beautiful. More beautiful than any vampire could ever wish to be (including Rosalie Hale, for those who have read the books.). They have incredible bodies, lithe and graceful and perfectly toned. They also have great personalities (they are caring, kind and generally extremely likable, and to top it all off, they are extremely intelligent). As well as this, they have the ability to channel magic, however this over time wears them out. Being one with nature is also a great thing.. They are able to empathize perfectly - they feel other people's feelings (a bit like Jasper Hale, except much less potent) and if they concentrate intensely, they can "taste" the atmosphere around them. This too, however, wears them out. Also their feelings are 10 times more potent than vampires or humans. They have different feelings and different symptoms, if you wish, such as a red haze (intense anger) or everything being bright and sharp (intense happiness). These intense feelings also make them give off smells - when happy, anyone who passes by smells their favourite things, (excuse the British spellings) when sad, they give off a fresh, minty smell, a spicy smell when angry, and a collection of the sweetest smells imaginable when in love. Ahhh. Elves also smell succulent to vampires - BIG TROUBLE!!!
Keaton channels the elements (this and the next thing are exclusive to him) and his hair crackles and sparks with magic when he is angry.
Phew! That's all. P.s, this FF is set in the first book, twilight.
I sighed as I got up. First day at school. In Forks. The rainiest town in Washington.
Ahhh, Forks. The bane of my life. The grey clouds that coated the sky every day made me feel very gloomy – and other people felt it if they annoyed me. Elves are well known for the unusual acuteness they have when they're feeling something. An example is yesterday: I only just arrived and people were already making fun of me! Ugh!
The fact that I had recently lost all of my elvin family to a load of blood elves really didn't help me control my temper. By the time I'd finished my tongue-lashing, at least ten people had come to see what all of the commotion was about, and the looks of pure venom that I shot at them scattered them as if I was a fox and they were a load of rabbits.
As I said before, I had recently lost my family to a load of filthy blood elves. They are like forest elves, however they feel an inexplicable craving for completely and utterly savaging things and leaving the thing in question lying in a pool of it's own blood.
Oh yes. Blood elves love that. And that's what happened to my family. Slaughtered like a load of pigs. They tried to get me then.
That's when I discovered my power.
Controlling the elements is very difficult, you know. You have to learn how blend with them – the magic of Quintessence, the fluidity of water, the fury of fire, the strength of earth, and of course, the grace of air.
The way I got my back on those piles of troll dung is not nice.
Let's just say it contained icicles.
The thing is, with immortal creatures, they can only be killed by other immortal creatures. The magic of elves, the strength of vampires, the savagery of werewolves. So yes, I killed the blood elves, then what do I get?
I get shipped from sunny Ojai, California, to rainy Forks, Washington.
Fun, fun, fun. I'm an orphaned elf, living on my own (“He's extremely capable and will be fine by himself.” says Mr. Tyler, my lawyer) and now, thanks to my extraordinary intelligence, they've plonked me with a load of 17 year-olds. Ugh. Being flawless has it's bad points, y'know.
So, there you go. My mini elvin history. Now you know why I'm here and why I'm in a class full of 17 year-olds. And why, right now, I'm flying through the air at high speeds to get to school on time (all thanks to Quintessence!).
As I land in front of the car park and enter it, a red Chevy truck that looks utterly funky passes me, and a girl with brown hair, brown eyes and pale skin glances at me. The wind suddenly changes, violently blowing my vivid, flaming hair into crazy shapes, but thankfully not revealing my pointed ears.
And then I saw them.
The perfect, marble bodies.
The pale face.
The golden eyes.
Every nerve in my body screamed.
To be continued......
If there are any fans of The Twilight series who see this, tell me how you like it, OK?
Maybe, just maybe, you'll find me there, waiting......
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