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 The Face of Earth (working title) 
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One of the summer assignments for my English course next year is to write a good prologue from which we have a story planned out. This is what I came up with in the middle of the night, the working title for the story being "The Face of Earth." Hope you enjoy. =]

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Prologue


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I'm an absolute maniac when it comes to grammar/punctuation so this will be long, bear with me. :twisted:

Zapheres wrote:
the freshly mown lawn stained with blood, the front door broken in half, also stained


This could be better, you could add a little more description and change it to something like, '...the front door was broken in half, blood slowly dripped down the mahogany frame.' It

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uhh... yeah... what he said. How ever I think this would make a good story, just ease up on the carnage, your going for a shock and awe effect and it doesn't suit you. but I incourage and dare you to build on this story :wink:

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