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Welcome to 'The Forgotten Son'- or TFS. Within this forst post I'll include (1) The Table of Contents, (2) The Prologue (you can't skip this if you hope to understand the story), and (3) The PM List- as part of the list you'll recieve a reminder whenever I post a new chapter. So, if you want to be PMed whenever I update... tell me. And I will.

I'm posting this on every forum in which TFS is updated, as well as editing it into the first post in every forum. Throughout my posting of the story various grammar mistakes have and will be found and altered; for the sake of simplicity the final version of every chapter will be found here.

I'll go back over old chapters once in a while here to edit and alter grammar and structure mistakes, and overall if you're new to the story or plan to read over old chapters again, the given link is the 'official' compiling of all of the most up-to-date versions of each chapter. Feel free to post reviews there in addition to or instead of at this forum, and please feel more than welcome to point out every grammar mistake you can there so that it can be fixed. I'm not always going to catch every single one...



Table of Contents

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Chapter 1: Weak
(The post just below this.)

Chapter 2: Not So Bad
(A little farther down than chapter one)

Chapter 3: Smile For You

(Pretty far down, but easy to spot as the thrid giant block of text)

Chapter 4: Turn for the Better

(Bottom of this page)

Chapter 5: Teeter-Totter

(Close to the top of page two)

Chapter 6: Through the Darkness
(A few posts down from ch. 5)

Chapter 7: Through the Darkness II
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Prologue
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He


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Tue Jun 06, 2006 8:15 pm
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Sorry for the double post, but I did this for the sake of having my chapters a little organized. From here on, I'll post updates every Friday. If you like what you read, please continue to read and tell me what you think!

Chapter 1
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Tue Jun 06, 2006 8:17 pm
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I never got his payment lol.

Pretty good length for a first chapter. No grammar or spelling mistakes. Little cheesy on the "People hate weak pokemon" plot, but it's still pretty good. Hurray for Silver cameo.

9.5/10

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Thanks for the review! Anyone else...?


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I like it; you should continue.

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Yup! Every Friday.


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Happy Friday!

Chapter 2
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Once the red-haired boy disappeared over the horizon, Luke gave the magikarp a tight hug.



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Please... someone... review it.....


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Awesome work, I like it a lot ^_^ A very nice writing style, and excellent spelling and grammar, that's the way to go! :wink: Three thumbs up, keep it up!


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Three thumbs up? Ouch... I feel bad for the poor guy whose thumb you stole >_o

Thankies for the comments though! Now I can die happy ^___^


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This is definetely one of the better fan-fics I've read. Keep up the good work. :)

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I plan to! Chapter three's already written, And I'm putting it up on Friday. Please read it then!


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Well, it's nice that you can write so fast. I sure would not be able that :shock:

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I have/had a bunch of chapters written in advance.... Tomorrow's chapter marks my last pre-written one.


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What? You have other things to do than ensure we are provided with free entertainment? How dare you! :P

Keep up the chapter writing Banov, can't wait for #3.

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Good thing, too, because you won't have to.

Chapter 3
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The idea of being allowed to battle brought new life to many of Luke


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Hurray I didn't have to wait.

Let's see if this works again. I can't wait to have hundreds of beautiful women lusting after me.

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... Is anyone else going to comment?!


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. . . . I really hope that someone besides Dave read chapter four, because otherwise I'm moving forward without you...

Chapter Four
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As Luke and his team traveled back home, Luke couldn


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Go Luke. Beating off a nidoran and flirting with a girl all in the same day.

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I read it too...and it was good. A few mistakes in spelling/grammar, but other than that, just splendid.

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S/G Mistakes? Awwww man, I thought I caught them all this time >_o

Oh well, at least the plot's all good. Chapter five should be up Friday, but it may not be up until Tuesday.


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Somewhere you spelled 'all' 'al'.

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Oops. Oh well :p


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It's friday...

WHERE'S THE NEW CHAPTER!!

I HAVE TO KNOW WHAT HAPPENS MAN!!!

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