I had this dream that I need some honest opinions for. I know it is kind of weird to tell people my ideas that come to me at night, but I need sincere honest advice on this story.
Summary: Arron Walker is in a rough spot. His mother is unattentave and his brother drinks heavily. His father recently died in a car wreck and Arron was especially concerned about how it affected his grades in school. One night his brother came home drunk and shoved Arron in his room. Arron then hears all of his brothers high school friends come in the house. Arron's brother cranks up the tunes, and everyone dances and drinks. Everyone, exept the "Crayons" as they're called in school. They all seem to wear their own special color and is weird in their own way. Tanya, the leader, wears a light blue scarf and light blue everything else. Sheila, the brains, wears green glasses with white clothing. Maya, the looks, wear a pure red jacket over her yellow top. People say that the Crayons are so obseesed with those colors that some of the dye rubs off on their skin. Judging by how much they wear those, that could be the case. The entire party consists of jocks and cheerleaders saying,"Go home" or, "Leave the crayola factory." Most of the bullying came from Arron's brother. The girls devised a plan to gain vengence on him. They ran upstairs and took the rubbing alchohal from the bathroom and poured it into his wine. He soon passes out and Arron watches them creep twords him. Arron backs into the wall and all the girls do is touch him square on the nose. Arron then suffocates and passes out while he listens to the girls laugh and fade into the background.
Tell me what you think so far.