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Here's my story about a trainer named Ben. I'll let you see for yourself what he's like.

Current pokemon Ben has:

*SHINY* {poliwhirl}
~Brick Break
~Water Pulse
~Ice Punch
~Strength

{feebas}
~Splash

{lombre} *Juan*
~Rain Dance
~Leech Seed
~Toxic
~Razor Leaf

{chinchou}
~Shock Wave
~Thunderwave
~Ice Beam
~Water Pulse

((Okay, I'm back. ^^ This is from Ben's point of view, BTW.))

"Poliwhirl, Strength!"
As the pale blue poliwhirl rushed up to the foe's raticate, I noticed confidence in the poliwhirls eyes. That surprised me. Poli had never been real confiedent.
"Raaaaaaaat!" was the raticates cry as poliwhirl landed an uppercut on it's chin.
"Raticate, return," the opponant, a youth of about 11, said.
"Good battle, your raticate is really powerful."
"Thanks, your poliwhirl is amazing!" he said as we shook hands.
"It takes time to get there, you know," was my reply.

"Hey! BEN!"
I heard a familiar voice behind me. I turned around and saw Liz running up behind me.
"Hi!" I called back, waving. I noticed Liz's sneasel dashing around in zig-zags following her.
"Want to battle?"
"I can't right now, my poliwhirls exhausted. Maybe later?"
"Do you have to use that poliwhirl all the time? Just because it was your starter doesn't mean you have to use it 24/7," she said, stamping her foot.
"Actually, it does. And I have to get to Cerulean by night, I really want to-"
"Meet Misty, you've say that about a hundred times a day,"Liz said, cutting me off.
"Well. Don't you want to meet Loreli? You say that a hundred times a day."
Liz stuck my toungue out at me. "Please?"
"Well, okay. Why not?"
"Yay!" She backed up, making room for a battlefield.
"Okay, lets start this, go Juan!"
"Go dewgong!"
"See?! You use your starter all the time!"
"You know, we don't have to battle. Don't make me sick my absol on you!"
I flinched. I hated it when she made fun of my fear of absols. I scratched my arm.
"Good luck!"
"Not like I need it," Was Liz's snoddy reply.

~TO BE CONTINUED~

This is my first story, hope you like it.

[edit]Information about where this is will be revealed next chapter.[/edit]


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Thu Apr 28, 2005 3:20 pm
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u know,i really lke it,i hate all the "once apon a time in pallet town some person got some pokemon that was lv.1/4",it gets kinda boring after a while,i like how ur story starts like this


9/10

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Thu Apr 28, 2005 8:01 pm
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I like starting off in the middle of an adventure. Different. 9.2/10.

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dragonfan#149 wrote:
I like starting off in the middle of an adventure. Different. 9.2/10.

Mainly the same as what I would say.
My rating system says...
{staryu}{staryu}{staryu} entertainment. Only because i've only read 1 episode.

Keep it up WPM, cant wait to hear more.

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This story will probably go on slower than the others, I have this wierd thing called a 'life' ya know. ;o


Fri Apr 29, 2005 5:02 pm
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Water Pokemon Master wrote:
This story will probably go on slower than the others, I have this wierd thing called a 'life' ya know. ;o


really?i dont :lol: ,but i do have a gameboy,does that count? :lol:

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darkmagician2523 wrote:
Water Pokemon Master wrote:
This story will probably go on slower than the others, I have this wierd thing called a 'life' ya know. ;o


really?i dont :lol: ,but i do have a gameboy,does that count? :lol:

Nah, i've heard a life is a big responseability lol :lol:

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Fri Apr 29, 2005 11:05 pm
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Next chapter will be up later today. This one will be quite long, and in a script format, with more information about how Ben looks and where he is.


Sat Apr 30, 2005 6:13 am
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Interesting story, it's creative considering that it starts in the middle of the story not the begining, I give it 8.4/10.


Sat Apr 30, 2005 10:53 am
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*turns off headphones*

Ben: Juan, use leech seed!
Liz: Get out of the way!
*Dewgong got hit by a handful of seeds*
Liz: Dewgong, use water pulse!
Ben: You know, Juan is a grass/water type.
Liz: I know. =P
*When the blast of water hit Juan, he suddenly looked dazed*
Ben: Ack, I forgot about water pulse confusing! Juan, toxic attack!
*Juan raised up his hand, looked at it, and dropped it back on the ground, staring into space*
Liz: Yes! Dewgong, use Aurou Beam!
*A stream of bright colors lanced at Juan*
Ben: Juan, keep absorbing from Dewgong! Toxic!
*Juan Stared at Ben for a moment, then tossed a small handfull of sludge at dewgong, who was then poisoned*
Liz: Dewgong?
*The dewgong was panting, looking more tired than it should have*
Liz: Keep fighting, dewgong! Use body slam!
*Dewgong suddenly shot forward and hit Juan in the stomach*
Ben: Look out for that body slam! Use Rain Dance!
*Dark storm clouds blotted out the sun, and a light drizzle started*
*Rain collected in the lily pad on Juan's head*
Ben: Just wait and recover!
Liz: Dewgong!?
*The dewong suddenly keeled over and fainted*
*Ben walked over to Liz and offered her his hand*
Ben: Good match.
Liz: You too, I guess...
Ben: Don't worry. Remember our first battle? You royally owned me there.
Liz: *giggle* I remember that. Race you to the Pokecenter?
Ben: Bring it on. I have to get to Mt. Moon right after that, though.

<center>~~~~~~~~~~</center>

Two days later, still in Pewter City.

Poliwhirl: Pol, poli whirl poli!
*Ben is dragging Poliwhirl by the feet to Mt. Moon.*
Ben: I know, but what about what you said yesterday? You said you wanted to meet Misty!
Poliwhirl: Poliiiiiiii!
Ben: I know, I like Pewter too, but we have to go! End of discussion.

*Later, just inside Mt. Moon*

Voice: Hey! Do you want to battle?
A hyper looking girl bounced right up to Ben's face.
Ben: Ahhh! *Ben jumps back and covers his face with his arms*
Gir: HI!
Ben: *pats chest* O-okay-y, just d-don't s-scare m-m-me like th-that!
Girl: YAAAAAAAAAAAAY!
Ben: What did I just ask you to do?
Girl: Let's battle now! *she backed up a few paces*
Ben: I don't have a choice, do I? Go chinchou!
Girl: Go Clefairy!
Ben: You can go first.
Girl: Clefairy, use Pound!
*Clefairy rushes up and pounds chinchou hard in the face*
Ben: Chinchou, use thunderwave!
Girl: Uh-Oh!
Ben: Now I go first! Chinchou, Ice Beam!
Girl: Clefairy, Minimize!
*The clefairy shrank to about half of it's current size*
Ben: Aim, don't just fire! Thundershock!
*It missed*
Girl: Minimize!
*The clefairy managed to shrink some more*
Ben: Let's see if we can get that sucker parafused! Water pulse!
*It hit, but didn't confuse*
Girl: Minimize again!
*The clefairy was now roughly 3 inches tall*
Ben: Thundershock!
*It missed*
Girl: Clefairy, eat this cheri berry!
*She tossed her clefairy a small, bright red berry*
Ben: Thundershock! Come on chinchou!
*It missed*
Girl: Minimize!
*1 Inch tall clefairy*
I noticed a steely glint in Chinchou's eyes.
Ben: Thundershock!
Chinchou looked at me in confusion.
Ben: THUNDERSHOCK!
*Chinchou looked perplexed*
I ripped out my pokedex.
Ben: Dex, name current known moves of chinchou, ID number 72196!
Dex: Shock Wave, Water Pulse, Ice Beam, Thunderwave.
Ben: Shock Wave?!
I stared at chinchou in wonder. She looked happy.
Ben: Use shock wave!
*Small jolts of electricity suddenly splashed in all directions*
Ben: Yes!
*About five small jolts hit the clefairy, knocking it out*
Girl: WHAT?! How did that happen?!
Ben: Shock Wave never misses.
Girl: No fair! *stamps foot*
Ben: I win this match. good battle.
*The girl glumly shook my hand*


((w00t. There's chapter two.))


Sat Apr 30, 2005 1:36 pm
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Fantastic. Great battles :D 9.4/10

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Thanks. =D


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love the inch-tall clefairy!!very funny!!

9.4/10

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Chapter three will take longer than expected. I haven't gotten an inspiration yet. Sorry.


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unlike me,u prolly have a life,and stuff to do...so its ok if it takes time to think bout it :)

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