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here is a preview of a fanfic i started writing today, please review it!!!:

The Beginning

It was a quiet morning in the small town of pallet, and a raven haired twelve year old had just got out of his bed. His name was Jamie Rutty, and he was due to pick up his first pokemon from Professor Oak, So he got dressed [black jeans, a dark blue t-shirt and a black leather jacket] and went down stairs to get some breakfast.


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Thu Apr 21, 2005 1:39 pm
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not too bad,but im not sure until i see more of it:)


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ok here is the second part of my story, pleeze review:

As they were walking out of the lab mart said to Jamie


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It's Interesting, I can't seem to get involved easily, but mind you I cant get involved into anything so don't worry.

5.5/10 I need to see more to give a good proper rate

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not too bad i suppose,but i think ur going too fast

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can an admin or mod please lock this as i will not be continuing my story

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YES you will J!

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y arent u continueing?i kinda liked it :cry:

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ok i'll continue it, but some of the characters have changed so i could work kryten into the story


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here is part three, pleeze review:

Martin, Jamie and Misty have just left the pokemoncenter and are now walking through Viridian Forest,


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hmmmm....not too bad i guess....i really love the evee


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heres part four please review:



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ooo,battle!!i like it alot:)....

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heres part five, thanks for the reviews:

As they entered pewter, jamie slowed down to talk to martin who was walking behind him and misty


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I also rated you, be careful of the technical stuff, such as grammar, captilization etc. But do keep going!


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o.k thanks truestar, but my co-author kryten is working on that


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ok heres part six, keep them reviews comin:

As they entered the gym someone shouted to them from behind


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kryten2x4b wrote:
jamie then began kicking him in the stomach, and to finish it he picked ash up and kneed him in the groin


:shock: .


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heres part seven, thanks for the reviews:

Jamie woke up in a hospital bed,


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HAHAHAHA!!omg that funny....


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thanks for the reviews, theres a bit of romance in part eight


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Keep working 2x4b! Go kryterz!

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ok heres part eight, thanks for the reviews:

They all entered the pokemoncenter, and then brock got a funny look on his face as he saw a nurse joy run past and he started to float after her,


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awwwwwww,how sweet

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heres part nine, keep them reviews comin:

The next morning, brock and martin were sat around the camp fire looking at the spot where jamie and misty had walked off, martin stood up and said to brock


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