Are you working on adding to this? Because I really like where it could be headed. I like that Elizabeth is a reluctant Pokémon trainer, and that she didn't get a typical starter. I hope you continue writing. Brent sounds like a di...fficult person to be around, but do I smell something between them? Or is that pizza BURNING IN THE OVEN I gotta go.
Yes, I work on it in small bits and segments when I get a chance. Because of my writing style, it sometimes takes me a while to get very far in a story. >_> I've also never had anyone actually read what I've written, so my motivation has been minimal.
I do not like when people just take the standard Pokemon storyline and re-create it with a different set of Pokemon or a new area or both. It seems lazy to me. It bothers me that the main series has such a definite pattern, too. So I try to create my own scenarios. o: And characterization is something I try to focus on, so I'm glad you find the characters interesting so far.
I dunno what you're doing
But keep doing it
This is a segment of chapter 1 that I've started working on. The chapter isn't complete by far, but it's a little bit more to read while I work on more. ^^
-----Chapter 1: Graduation Gift
Lizzy felt like her belt was heavier now that Emily rested inside her pokeball. She had to admit that, while she still wasn't certain that she wanted a pokemon, the feeling of having someone with her was comforting.
Her relaxation by the water was now a memory, so Elizabeth decided to start heading home. It was beginning to creep into the early afternoon and her parents would be home in a few hours, so she thought it best to get the house a little cleaner before they arrived. When she was just about to exit the forest, she saw one of her friends from school walking in her direction. The girl's face lit up when she saw Lizzy.
"Hey there, Lizzy!" she called, waving an arm as if someone could miss her in that bright yellow shirt.
"Hi, Maddy," Lizzy responded with much less enthusiasm. Madeline was a good friend: they would hang out and go places together. They had girl nights and Maddy was easy to talk to. But Elizabeth was very independant and she found Maddy's clingyness to be rather irritating after a while.
"What's new with you?" Maddy asked with a smile, stopping in front of Lizzy.
"Well..." she hesitated, not sure whether she should tell Maddy about her new friend or act like something major hadn't happened in the past hour. After a few seconds of hesitation and a confused look as Maddy waited for Lizzy to finish, Lizzy decided that she needed to share this with someone to get their advice. And Maddy was trustworthy, despite her sometimes overwhelming energy. "I caught a pokemon."
Lizzy watched as Maddy heard her and thought very carefully about what was just said. It took a rather long time for Maddy to show any sign of processing the information. "You... Elizabeth, caught a... pokemon?"
"But you've said that you would never..."
"I know. It just kinda happened." Lizzy shifted uncomfortably. This is why she didn't want to share the information in the first place. She had made such a huge deal about not getting a pokemon that she felt like the biggest hypocrite in the world.
"What pokemon is it?!" Maddy hopped up and down with the biggest grin Lizzy had seen on her. She was taken aback; there were no more questions or criticisms. This just became the most exciting event of the day for her friend.
"I'll show you!" Lizzy said with a grin of her own. She pulled out Emily's pokeball and released her. Lizzy's new oddish looked up at Maddy and smiled.
"Awwwww it's so cute!" Maddy scooped up Emily and hugged her tightly. Emily kicked her legs back and forth, trying to feel solid ground again. Lizzy giggled. Emily squirmed in her direction, so Lizzy took her pokemon back from Maddy gently, letting it rest in her arms. "You two are so cute together, too! I knew you'd find a pokemon eventually! Did you give it a name?"
Lizzy nodded. "Emily."
Maddy beamed as if everything in the world had been corrected. Then she got the look that meant that she just remembered her task prior to getting distracted. "I have to try to find some oran berries! Do you want to come with me?"
"I would join you, but my parents will be home soon and I still need to clean up the house." She tapped Emily's pokeball against her to send her back inside, then tucked the pokeball in her belt again. "I'll probably see you tomorrow, though!"
"Alright! Have fun with Emily!" Maddy winked as she jogged past Lizzy and into the forest. Lizzy watched her for a few seconds before finishing her walk back home.To be continued...