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Should Lance be a Dragon Master or a Master of Diversity?
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MOD PLEASE LOCK THIS AND DELETE IF YOU ARE ABLE PLEASE!!!

NOTE: I am deleting this thread due to lack of interest. I will be making a new, better, one under a new name but made by me. Please any following supporters look out in the future for a new better story.

P.S. The story line will be generally the same but compltely different. Know what i mean?


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{dragonite} Chapter One: Clash of Dragons! {dragonite}

Lance walked into Blackthorn with his five Ultra balls at his belt and his prize Master ball. He slowly wandered into the gym of that town, ran by Clair. Clair was a tall girl and always bossy. And it ran through the blood-line. She was his aunt. And she was always pestering him to visit the gym and try out her new Pokemon. Every time she changed her line-up he thrashed her with his elite Dragon Team. That ran through the family as well.

"Cmon Lance in you come" she smiled and stared into his misty blue eyes, "Mind Dave as you pass".

"Dave?".

"Oh just a Tamer i employed from... ah yes Canalave!" she strode to her podium and prepared for a fight, "Go Kingdra!".

"Oh aunty will you ever give up on that hopeless creature!" he smiled back at her and readied his Ultra Ball, "Ah well... Go Salamence!"

She smiled and commanded her first move. "Kingdra! Ice Beam!" a beam of sparkling ice shot out of Kingdra's spout and hit Salamence with an enormous blow. Salamence fell instantly to the floor.

"Well you actually managed to get past my first Pokemon! Hahahaha!" he grabbed his next Ultra ball and threw it to the floor. "Go Dragonite!".

"Easy peasy! Ice Beam now Kingdra!" again a beam of ice came and struck Dragonite with a huge force. Her mouth dropped wide as she saw what happened. It had survived the attack.

"Dragonite has higher Defence and Special Defence than Salamence Clair!" Lance caught her stare "Now Dragonite use Dragon Rush!". An enormous force hit Kingdra and sent it flying across the gym.

"Grrrrrrrr! Go Venusaur! Hahaha my secret weapon and my last resort!" she stomped on the floor and gave her nephew a menacing look "Venusaur use Hyper Beam now!" Dragonite was sent flying to floor with a thud.

"I congratulate you Clair you have beaten two of my Pokemon but that will be all... Go Charizard!" he smiled and watched Charizard stretch "And since you need to recharge then i'll take this turn! Use Fire Blast now!". A blast of fire came sprawling out of Charizard's mouth and left Venusaur dazzled and dazed. That was the end.

"I suppose that'll teach me to change my type slightly...".

"Aunty you should focus on trying to beat the countless people trying to get your badge. After the League's merged i have been very busy" he smiled looked into her grey eyes, "Try and keep them off me yeah?".

He turned on his heel and withdrew Charizard. He looked up and summoned Flygon. "Flygon... Fly me to Sinnoh i have work to do..."


*COMING SOON*
An insight into how good the Elites really are...
And one of the Elites go missing!!!


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{torchic} Special Chapter: Ultimate Four {torchic}

Lance walked into the gateway to the Pokemon league. A few months back the government had decided to merge the exsisting leagues together. To create the ultimate league. Lance had to choose one person from each region, of different types, to have their place. The others were sent to the Battle Frontier to battle people there.

From the Kanto region came: Agatha the OAP of Ghost Pokemon. She was chosen because of her hardiness and experience.

Team: {gengar} {dusclops} {dusknoir} {chimecho} {spiritomb} {banette}


From the Johto region came: Karen the majestic mistress of Dark Pokemon. She was chosen because of her speed and agility.

Team: {houndoom} {honchkrow} {umbreon} {mightyena} {shiftry} {weavile}


From the Hoenn region came: Glacia the cold and fierce master of ice pokemon. She was chosen because of her attack and will power.

Team: {glalie} {froslass} {abomasnow} {glaceon} {walrein} {jynx}


From the Sinnoh region came: Flint the fiery fighter of Fire Pokemon. He was chosen because of his least losses out of the other from that region.

Team: {drifblim} {rapidash} {camerupt} {ninetales} {magmortar} {magcargo}


And finally the Master: Himself the calm and sleek handler of Dragon Pokemon. He was chosen because... well he was better than all of them.

Team: {dragonite} {flygon} {garchomp} {charizard} {salamence} {rayquaza}


He thought he had chosen well because no-one had even got past Agatha since it was merged. Many had tried and failed then tried again the failed again. In the end they gave up and went onto Contests and of course the Battle Frontier. In fact no-one came to Pokemon League in ages. Although it was rather tricky to get to. They had decided to build it inside the Johto Falls. Trainers had to travel to the falls and go straight through them. They had decided to get rid of Victory Road. They had thought of a better idea. You had to get all 32 badges before you could challenge them. Which meant eight from every region. And that meant many trainers got to see a variety of Pokemon before they arrived and often forgot about the League.

It was in desperate need of people to fight against. But all in all it was peaceful and the Champions, as they were now called, got many days off to do as they please. They got contacted by the Pokemon Center there when a trainer was going to challenge them and they would make their way there.

But Lance had been called here because something had happened. Flint, the last Champion, had gone missing. All that was left in his room was a note reading: "He got lost in the Ruins of Alph".

Lance needed no more warning. He sent out his trusty Flygon and headed for Violet City...


*COMING SOON*
Lance takes a trip to Unown Alph...
And a Camerupt is causing trouble!!!


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Isn't it a bit of a rip off doing basically the same as Lance is?
Lance is a dragon trainer.
Then there is another Lance the dragon trainer...?

What in the Purugly's fur? (couldn't resist.. XD)
So.. The story is very confusing, like the first chapters had gone missing..
Kinda.. Confusing and not super well build.. =/


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Well i thought i'd throw you in it at the deep end instead of explaining things since he was born .etc.

I'm not changing the name for your sake. I just happened to choose the same name and type than him. What's your problem? It's not a "rip off" because i choose what goes in my book not you! Anyway...

P.S. Looking at your post i can see that your english isn't "super well build" either. LOL


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{unown} Chapter two: Ruins of Aplh {unown}

Lance wandered into the excavation site near the Ruins of Alph. It was a hot summers day and everyone was in the rest house nearby. He wandered into the main chamber and found himself in a huge room lined with carvings of the various Unowns. As he walked deeper into the chamber the occasional Unown floated by and watched the stranger.

At the end of the room was a man, seemingly waiting for him.

"Hello there?" Lance approached him with caution.

"About time" the stranger glared at Lance "I thought you would of made finding your friend top priority, but yet you are later than usual...".

"Who are you? What have you done with Flint?" Lance slowly curled his fingers around one of the Ultra Balls.

"I am... wait i'm not going to tell you who i am! Fool!" the stranger walked into another room and re-appeared with Flint, tied and gagged. A few muffled cries came from the fire champion when he saw Lance.

"Let him go, it's me you want"

"No it's not! You know nothing! I only kidnapped him to let you know that i am here and ready to bring violence and destruction!" he smiled and grabbed something from his pocket. He threw it to the floor and the room was engulfed wih smoke. When the smoke had finally cleared the room was empty. Only Flint and Lance remained.

"Cmon lets get out of this creepy place" Lance untied Flint and watched him release his Drifblim.

"Drifblim! Fly us to the Pokemon League!" Lance steadily clambered onto the baloon Pokemon and let it take him high into the sky towards the League. Flint had obviously done this many times before, he wasn't nervous at all.

Thy soon arrived at the League to find Agatha, Karen and Glacia all waiting for them.

"Oh Flint dear, are you OK?" Agatha hobbled towards him as Karen followed her. Glacia simply smirked and walked over to Lance.

"You know i would of preffered it if he had gone missing, permanantly" she looked at Lace with her pale irisis.

"Why do you have to be so cold-hearted Glacia?"

"You wouldn't understand..." she strolled casually towards th League doors and into the training area.

"Cmon guys we better go in tell Nurse Joy that everything is OK" Lance looked at the rest of the group "You know she has a soft-spot for you Flint".

"She's been worried sick" Karen laughed as she saw the look on Flint's face.

"Knock it off" Flint walked into the League, happy to be somewhere he was familiar with...


*COMING SOON*
One Island is shocked about Flygon...
Canalave gets a unique visitor!!!


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{flygon} Chapter three: Flygon flight {flygon}

A few months after the kidnapping Lance was sprinting up the stairs of Celadon Mall. He was after two of each evolution stone and knew this was the only place to buy them.

"Hi what can i get you?" the checkout lady had wandered over to him as he came out of the stair-well.

"Two of every evolution stone if you please" he followed her towards the checkout where she placed out eight groups of stones onto the checkout.

"Thunder Stones, Fire Stones, Water Stones, Leaf Stones, Moon Stones, Shiny Stones..." she was interuppted by Lance.

"And Dawn and Dusk Stones, i know" he smiled and scooped them up into his bag, "I'll send over the payment later".

The cashier sighed and sat back into her chair. On his way out he noticed a large flock of Pidgeots flying over his the city. They can't be seen wild so it must be a trainer's convention of some sort. He watched them fly over Lavender Town and then they vanished over the peak of Rock Tunnel. They must be going to Cerulean he thought. He threw his Ultra Ball into the air and out came Flygon.

"Flygon Go!" he hopped onto the back of it's scaly skin and told it where to send him, "Take me over to One Island, i want to take a look at that Mountain". Flygon kicked off the ground wit it's back legs and soared up into the air. They flew west until they hadleft the coast and were travelling over the ocean. Many boats were passing under them and many trainers were travelling on there Pokemon, to and fro from each of the islands.

They landed down on One island and were soon flocked by many people admiring his Flygon. It was not a Pokemon that many had seen before. Especially in the Sevii Islands. They all patted it and stroked it's scaly green skin. Some trainers even got out there Pokedex's to record data on it. But the party ended when Lance insisted that it should bo back into it's capsule and that they move on.

He walked north towards Kindle Road and then onto Mt.Ember. There had been many reports of the volcano spewing lava from it's peak when it is supposed to be inactive. Some time ago a trainer also took on this challenge and found a Moltres at it's peak but it got away. Lance was sure it wouldn't be back as Moltres shoots fore not lava. But he had to answer the calls of the people of One Island...


*COMING SOON*
Criminal pasts in Canalave...
Roark isn't the little boy we think!!!


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Dragon Champion wrote:
P.S. Looking at your post i can see that your english isn't "super well build" either. LOL


I wasn't trying to insult you.. o3o;; and yes, My English isn't splendid, Since I'm not English at all..


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Oh rite no offence intended to your nationality whatever it may be.

Nice story btw way.


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{camerupt} Chapter four: Cameruption! {camerupt}

Lance trudged up towards the summit of Mt.Ember. The sun was shooting down on him like a tiny needles. He could feel his skin becoming redder and redder. Sand and Ash were being blown about as though this was a desert. He entered the main cave, which kept him out of the sun. It took him many hours to scale all the tunnels and ladders that were infested with tonnes of Zubats and Geodudes. He almost wished he hadn't come.

When he finally reached the summit he could see that the volcano was not active at all. In fact it was completely dried out. He walked round the rim of crater and found a machine attached to a pipe on the edge. It was pumping lava down the South side of the cliff and into the ocean.

He was about to leave when a Camerupt stopped him in his tracks. He remembered Flint's Camerupt. It gave a tremendous roar.

"Easy girl" Lance tried to step round it but it moved into his path. Suddenly balls of lava came bursting out of it's crater like humps and Lance died out the way.

"Alright then! Garchomp! I choose you!" I blue shark like Pokemon waas ejected from his Ultra Ball and raised it's head to the sun and the Sand. It liked sand and even made it more accurate than normal in a sandstorm like this one.

"Garchomp use Earthquake!" Lance quickly jumped onto a higher rock to avoid falling into the crater from the tremors. The Camerupt instantly fell to the floor. On it's belly was a spiral shape, twisting and turning, around and around.

Lance walked over to the machine again and saw the same spiral on all sides of it. This couldn't of been a coincedence. They were both marked with the same symbol. But who would want masses of Lava? And who would guard it with a Camerupt?

Lance returned Garchomp and sent out Flygon.
"Fly me to Canalave please!" he hopped onto his Flygon and flew off the mountain. Something was going on and whatever it was he needed to find out.

He landed soon and Canalave and returned his Flygon. Canalave was a quiet City. It was much like Slateport and Lilycove. It was surrounded by water and ships coming to and fro from Iron Island. Many strong trainers came here to test their skills on Byron, the steel gym leader. Since trainers had to defeat all the other region gyms now Byron got strong opposition. But nothing he couldn't handle.

Lance walked across the bridge and over to the Library. He was going to find out about the Spiral mark on Mt.Ember. If he was going to find anything about it then the information would be here.

He entered the Library and looked cautiously at the receptionist.

"Hi, can i help you?" she smiled.

"Yes i'd like a book on ancient markings and scriptures please" he smiled back at her and glanced over at the many bookshelves that lined the walls.

"Ah yes there should be one on the top floor" she smiled once again and watched him go upstairs, until her phone rang and went back to work.

He quickly got the top floor and spent the rest of the afternoon looking through all the tatty books for the one he wanted. It had fallen down the back of one of the bookcases and the front cover was missing. But he knew this must be it.

Ancient symbols and scriptures. Chapter 7: Symbols. Long ago many criminal organizatons formed and with them were their own symbol, their own identity. Many of the symbols were made up of shapes and skulls. Many were not however. But one stood out in the 20th century. It was shaped like a Grumpig's tail, it was a spiral. They were named Team Spiral and used Psychic Pokemon to do their crimes. But in 1978 their HQ was set on fire by Team Magma and their boss was killed in the blaze. Nothing is known if anyone survived...

Lance put the book down and thought about the blaze. If their boss was killed and there were no known survivors then who is impersonating them? Maybe someone who think they can be their own organization?

Then it hit him. There were no known survivors. One could of escaped. Or this could just be a figment of his imagination. Whatever it was, he had better things to do...


*COMING SOON*
Agatha isn't an old dusty relic...
Pelipper delivers good tidings!!!


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{bastiodon} Chapter six: Challenger {bastiodon}

He arrived back at the Pokemon League feeling excited and happy. Someone had decided to challenge the Elite Four! Apparently they specialised in Rock Pokemon, so it would be a nice challenge for Agatha.

They all gathered behind a glass sheet hidden inside the wall. From here they could see the entire battle. Agatha slowly waddled into the center and the boy came from the opposite direction. It was Roark! The gym leader from Oreburgh city.

"Oh hello dear" Agatha smiled and pulled out a Dusk Ball from her pocket.

"I will become a League Champion Agatha so don't try and stop me!" he grabbed an Ultra Ball and tossed it to the ground. "Go Golem!".

"Oh what a nice Pokemon, pitty it won't last!" she threw her Dusk Ball to the floor and out came Chimecho.

"Hahaha Golem Rock Slide!" an avalaunche of rocks came from all sides of the room. Agatha looked away as her Chimecho was buried in the fall. One of the rocks began to glow in a bluey white fashion. Chimecho slowly floated out of the rock, almost transparent. It had survived.

"Chimecho! Use Omnious Wind!" a bluster of dark purple wind filled the room. Roark's Golem tried to cover it's face with it's hands but the wind swept right through them. Golem fell with a thud and Roark quickly returned it.

"Alright then! Go Bastiodon!" a large creature with an enormous head came out of the Ultra Ball. "Use Flamethrower!" a line of flames came out of the Pokemon's mouth and hit the already damadged Chimecho. It fell to the floor with a spark in it's eyes.

Agatha returned the fainted Pokemon and thought carefully about her next move. She knew that Bastiodon was a steel type as well as rock. And her Dusclops knew Fire Punch.

"Go Dusclops!" a grey ghost like creature came out of the Dusk Ball. "Finish this fight with Fire Punch!". Dusclops jumped forwards and its hand turned into a ball of fire. It hit Bastiodon with brutal force and sent it flying across the room. It tried to get up again but failed. Roark returned it and sunk his head low.

"I need new Pokemon..." he was about to leave when the rest of the League came out clapping. All except for Glacia.

"You did well. You are definately on your way to becoming invincible" Karen walked towards him and patted him on the head.

"And when you change the team, i'd appreciate it if you'd send me a list of your team. I've told the other 31 gyms to do the same. I need to update my records. (and of course to let you lovely readers know whats what)

"Okay Lance. I'll be off now then." he turned around and walked out the door.

"I don't know what you lot applaud him for. He's pathetic" Glacia turned round also and walked out.

"That woman really needs to warm up a bit" Flint glared at her as she left.

"What are you suggesting dear?" Agatha smiled and laughed with the others.

"Nothing what you lot are thinking of!" he turned and went to his office.

"I'll have to wait on the lookout tower for those team lists. They'll be sended Pelippers anytime now" Lance walked off and into the flight of stairs...


*COMING SOON*
The gyms get a review...
Sabrina gets an unwelcome surprise!!!


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{bulbasaur} Special Chapter: Gyms {bulbasaur}

Lance stood at the top of the tower with the wind brushing through his hair. Volkner's list was late. But he was never a fan of flying Pokemon. Especially Pelippers. But soon enough it arrived. He gathered all the papers and tucked into his bag. He had a lot of work to do. He had to make sure that the gyms were sufficient to hold back the encoming challengers.

Brock of Pewter City: {geodude} {onix}
Misty of Cerulean City: {staryu} {starmie}
Lt.Surge of Vermilion City: {voltorb} {pikachu} {raichu}
Erika of Celadon City: {victreebel} {tangela} {vileplume}
Sabrina of Saffron City: {kadabra} {venomoth} {alakazam}
Koga of Fuschia City: {koffing} {arbok} {muk} {weezing}
Blaine of Cinnabar Island: {monferno} {rapidash} {arcanine} {magcargo}
Ranstap (he's new) of Viridian City: {rhydon} {dugtrio} {gastrodon}



Falkner of Violet City: {fearow} {pidgeot}
Bugsy of Azalea Town: {butterfree} {beedrill} {ariados}
Whitney of Goldenrod City: {clefable} {miltank} {wigglytuff}
Morty of Ecruteak City: {gengar} {mismagius} {shuppet}
Chuck of Cianwood City: {primeape} {poliwrath} {infernape}
Jasmine of Olivine City: {steelix} {magneton} {scizor}
Pryce of Mahogany Town: {dewgong} {glalie} {piloswine}
Clair of Blackthorn City: {kingdra} {salamence} {dragonair}



Roxanne of Rustboro City: {cradily} {corsola} {golem}
Brawly of Dewford Town: {machamp} {hariyama}
Wattson of Mauville City: {raichu} {flaaffy} {electrode}
Flannery of Lavaridge Town: {magcargo} {charizard} {quilava}
Norman of Petalburg City: {slaking} {blissey} {snorlax}
Winona of Fortree City: {swellow} {aerodactyl} {altaria} {pidgeot}
Tate and Liza of Mossdeep City: {lunatone} {solrock} {alakazam} {claydol}
Juan of Sootopolis City: {milotic} {walrein} {whiscash} {feraligatr}



Roark of Oreburgh City: {relicanth} {rampardos} {bastiodon}
Gardenia of Eterna City: {cherrim} {venusaur} {torterra}
Maylene of Veilstone City: {medicham} {machamp} {medicham} {poliwrath}
Wake of Pastoria City: {swampert} {gyarados} {blastoise} {empoleon}
Fantina of Hearthome City: {sableye} {chimecho} {gengar}
Byron of Canalave City: {bronzong} {steelix} {scizor}
Candice of Snowpoint City: {abomasnow} {froslass} {weavile} {mamoswine}
Volkner of Sunyshore City: {ampharos} {raichu} {magneton} {lanturn}



And that was that. He was satisfied with the power in the gyms and thought he best check on a few of their training methods though first...


*COMING SOON*
Saffron gets shunted into action...
A Badge is discovered!!!


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-applauds- Excellent storyline! I really want to see more stuff like this in the future.

P.S: This may be a bit too late, or a silly idea, but what about if someone other than Sabrina used a Pokemon not of their gym theme (like Leader Candice or Swimmer Katelyn's Medichams)? I think it'll add in an element of strategy there. It's just a suggestion, though.


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Well that's what Clair did and look what happened to her...

I'm gonna start doing previews at the end of every chapter so those who can't wait can see an insight of whats gonna happen soon. But it won't be neccesarily whats gonna happen in the next chapter, jus whats happening soon.


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-sigh- Oh alrighty then. Previews are good, but don't give them for dramatic bits like the Champion Battle or where it would take away suspense.


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{alakazam} Chapter seven: Sabrina Surprise! {alakazam}

Lance had been called to Saffron City on a state of emrgency. He had intercepted a message sent by a mere Spearow. It read:

"Elite Four, Please we need your help. I don't know if you would of heard this by now but Saffron is under a state of emergency. Over the last few hours an anonymous person has torched the gym and some of the houses to the ground. The city is ablaze. We ae trying are best to extinguish the fire with others from neighbouring cities but are failing.
Sabrina"


Lance gathered the rest his Pokemon to help. Not only were the Elite Four the ultimate test for trainers, but they were a rescue service and solved problems through out the world. This was definately a time for them. The entire city was alight. Many visitors flocked round the Champion and pointed as he landed.

Lance ran towards the gym. Outside it was Sabrina with her Alakazam. She was trying to command it to move some of the burning rubble eslewhere.

"Oh thank god your here, what can we do?" she looked at him with her big purple eyes.

"OK i think you are best going into the shelter and i'll try and get some more help from other cities" she nodded and rounded up the remaining citizens trying to save their houses with buckets of water. There was nothing they could do.

There were sudden cries of outrage when Lance flipped out his cell-phone and started talking into it. Then he put it away and sent out all his Pokemon, except Garchomp and Rayquaza. He couldn't send them out because they didn't have wings. He ordered them to start flapping wind towards the fire to try to extinguish it. There was more cries when Lance simply crouched beside a pond and stared into it's murky depths. Many citizens shouted insults to him as he appeared to be doing nothing.

Suddenly a great splash of water came from the pond and it ceased the string of insults. Four Pokemon arose from the surface, carrying four people. There was a Starmie, carrying Misty. A Kingdra, carrying Clair. A Milotic, carrying Juan. And a Gyarados, carrying Wake. The four gym leaders quickly sent out their remaining Pokemon and helped with the blaze. Jets of crystal blue water was poured all over the city and doused the fires. It was done in seconds. Everyone cheered and apologized to Lance. Many trainers had they Pokedexs out recording the info on the many different Pokemon out here to see.

Then Lance and the other four returned their Pokemon and huddled round each other.

"Do we know what caused this?" Misty asked and looked up at Lance.

"No not yet, but we know it can't of been an accident" they all looked at each other in horror.

"Who ever it was i'll bash their skulls together!" Wake slapped his fist into his other hand. He was a particulary violent man. But really he was a gentle giant.

"I don't think there will be any need for violence Wake" Juan elegantly hopped onto his equally elegant Milotic and dived into the pond.

"Yes i'm afraidwe have to go to" Clair hopped onto her Salamence this time and flew off into the air. When Lance had turned around Wake had gone too.

"Take care Lance" Misty smiled at him and put her hand on his shoulder.

"I will Misty" he smiled back and watched her mount her Starmie and dive back into the pond. Lance smiled. He walked into a tent where many scientists and Porygons were analysing data.

"Whats the verdict?" Lance walked over to one of the scientists.

"Well it s-seems that it was arson" he handed over a badge "We found this with the remains of the gym, it's s-shaped like a s-spiral".

Lance quickly grabbed the badge off the stuttering man and walked away with it. It was the same badge he had seen in Canalave Library. Team Spiral. Or someone impersonating them. On the back it read:

"Which city next i wonder?"

This shook Lance. It shook the other Elites when he told them that night. It even shook Glacia...


*COMING SOON*
Jasmine of Olivine...
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{luvdisc} Chapter eight: My love {luvdisc}

Lance arrived in Olivine City early morning. The Wingulls were pestering nearby fishermen on the coast and while distracted, the Krabbys would sneak in and steal what the Wingulls didn't. Lance loved the City. He loved the people. Their jobs. The lighthouse. The fresh open breeze. This was home to him.

He wandered slowly over to the gym. Owned by Jasmine. A quiet girl who trained steel typed Pokemon. She had long brown hair and emerald green eyes. She was also at one with this city. She was his type of girl. He had loved her hopelessly since childhood. He had never once attempted to tell her. She was fond of his visits and he sometimes suspected that she was fond of him to.

"Hello there" Lance shut the door behind him. She was sat at her desk writing on some paper.

"Hello Lance, how are you?" she had got up now and came over to him.

"I'm fine" he met her eyes with his "Just fine".

"I heard about your heroics in Saffron, how is Sabrina anyway?" she walked back over to her desk.

"She's worried about her people, but otherwise fine. It will take her a while to rebuild but with the Fighting Dojo next door they will have free labour" he followed her.

"Good good" she picked up some memos and locked them into her draw beneath.

"Have you been..." Lance stopped as she removed the key from the lock and placed it into her bra "Errr Have you been keeping well?".

"Yes i'm fine Lance, you should stop fussing.

"Sorry, i'm just worried about you, that's all".

"Well i'm flattered but is it in the Elite Four's nature to check on all gym's like this and worry about them?", he could hear the tone of sarcasm in her voice.

"Only the ones we like to visit..." he smiled and they stared into each others eyes for an unusualy long few seconds.

"We should go upto the Lighthouse tonight, if your not too busy" she turned away and walked towards the door.

"I'm never too busy for you Jasmine, you should know that" he followed her to the door and held it open for her.

"Thank you" she walked out with Lance hot on her trail "Shall we meet up there at say, 8 o'clock?" she stopped and faced him.

"That's fine with me, 8 o'clock it is then" he turned to go to the shore when she spoke once again.

"Lance..."

"Yes?" he turned quickly.

"Don't work yourself too much" he nodded and wandered over to the coast.

That last sentence wasn't exactly what he was hoping for. But he had to go and leave their short conversation. He walked over to one of the fisherman who seemed displeased.

"What's biting?" Lance sat down beside him.

"Nothing..." he looked glumly across the horizon.

"Nothing? That's odd..."

"I know. People have been saying something is under there, taking the fish".

"Havn't you sent a diving crew?"

"Yes but..." he looked at Lance with that face, the funeral face. "They didn't come back..."

"I see... I could have a look for you if you want"

"That'll be grand but i don't think you'll make it back..."

"Why it might just be a Wailord"

"No it's not a Pokemon, it's a building and a machine"

"A what! Don't worry i'll take this to the rest of the Elites and we'll send a crew down there to ask them some questions" Lance jumped up and walked off towards the exiting route...



*COMING SOON*
Underwater adventure...
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{lanturn} Chapter Nine: Lighthouse {lanturn}

Lance arrived swiftly into the Elite Four just as the sun set. The others were waiting for him.

"We got your message" they began to walk and talk into the entrance.

"Yes we have to send some people down there to find out whats taking all the fish down there, it's meant to be people controlled" Lance looked across at his friends and thought back to the times when his life was peaceful. What was happening to the World? The last few days had been tiring.

"I'll go with you and your team" Lance looked up and say his best and closest friend. Steven. He had known him since he was five and they had grown up together. He was once the Champion of the Hoenn region but that all changed. He hadn't seen him for months.

"Steven? What are you doing here?" they both walked to each other and shook hands.

"Glacia it's been a while" he went over to the others and shook hands with them too.

"OK were all set to go, what time have you told the team to mett us there?" Lance watched as Steven checked his watch.

"It's seven thirty, we should be there by about eight".

"Eight? I'm sorry i have something to do, can you manage without me? I can meet you down there if you want?" Lance looked at each of the faces of the people with him.

"Yes go ahead" Steven jumped up and sent out his Skarmory. He hopped on and shot off into the distance.

Lance sent out his Flygon and did the same. He flew staright over to Olivine. When he landed he saw the lighthouse beaming light over the sea and guided the ships to safety. He walked towards it called the elevator down. It came to him and he heard the familiar 'ding' noise when it hit the floor. He stepped inside as the doors opened. He pressed for the top floor and waited to reach it. The door's opened to find Jasmine waiting for him. She was looked out over the seas and admiring the view. He walked slowly over to her.

"Hello there" he watched as she jumped and turned round.

"You startled me" she smiled and caught her breath.

"What did you want me here for?" he leant against the gleaming railing that was put near the glass.

"I thought you would find the view impressive" she turned back to the seas.

"It's certainly very romantic" he turned and looked at her. She looked back and smiled. They slowly moved towards each other. This was it for Lance, his first embrace with the love of his life. Nothing could make him happpier now. But as though his thoughts had been read by the Devil there was a giant blow to the Lighthouse. They were sent flying across the floor. Rock and glass were sent with them. They were both buried under a mound of rock and sirens were going off in the city. He looked across at Jasmine. She was laying across from him buried in rock and mortar, still. There was blood trickling down the side of her face and in her hair. He suddenly felt drowsy, as if it was all a dream. Slowly black came from both sides of his eyes and covered his eyesight completely. He slowly lost consciousness...

*COMING SOON*
Cold hearted intent...
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The ususal things I look for are fine, or aren't serious; I usually look for proper grammar and spelling, which means I just skimmed it. I'm not thrilled about your using icons, even if it's just around the chapter titles. And in your special chapter, I really, really dislike your icons within the chapter's body. And you keep changing text color, don't do that unless you have to. Some colors are hard to read, like the blue. You're writing a story, and even if you're going into the future battles you need to write not insert icons and make your text multi-colored. Icons disrupt a reader's flow.

And I saw in your post on Charly's thread, which is deleted now it seems, that you had commented on not getting many replies. This forum isn't as active as others. You've been steadily posting at least once every day with a few times that had three days in between. It used to be a little more active, but it's dwindled. So, don't freak if you're not getting responses.

I'm not trying to lecture you, I'm mentioning things I was planning on saying there here since the thread is no longer here. You also stated that he had misspelled "armor," I checked and he hadn't. You were not incorrect either, though. Like "color" it can also be spelled with an "u" after an "o".

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{sharpedo} Chapter ten: Torpedo! {sharpedo}

Lance awoke. He expected to find himself in the Hospital. But he was still underneath rocks and mortar. He opened his eyes wide and groaned.

"He's waking up! Quick get him outta there!" there were dozens or Geodudes and Machops clearing rubble with their trusty trainers. Thank God they made it up here. He managed to get free and stood up, barely.

"Cmon we'll get you to Hospital" one sailor grabbed his arm and tried to take him away.

"Jasmine?" Lance stared at his face for any reaction.

"She's gone ahead to the Hospital. You should too" he tried to pull him away again. He wasn't going to go to Hospital. Who ever did this wanted to kill him and Jasmine. And he could take a lucky guess who. The underwater base must've fired the missile.

"I need some scuba gear and a wetsuit" Lance looked at them sternly and they didn't argue. He ran down to the shore and looked up at the sky. It must've been at least eleven o'clock. Had Steven come back? He quickly put on the wetsuit the sailor had brought him and placed the breath piece into his mouth. He waded into the water until it was upto his knees. Then he let his body fall into the depths.

The water was crystal clear, even with such minimal light. He swam deeper and deeper until he could a here a soft throbbing sound. It sounded like machinery. He swam deeper and deeper until he could not see in front of his face. He whipped out a torch and shone it into the murky depths. He could see something shining on the sea bed. A few Chinchous floated past him but no real threat. As he got closer he could see floodlights lighting the whole place up. It was a giant building under the sea!

He swam to what he presumed was the front door. It opened automatically revealing an air lock. He could see a guard sat at the air lock controls. He let Lance in then shut the door behind him. He was trapped in a small room of water. Then the guard pressed a few buttons and the water drained out. He then opened the door in front of him. Lance took off his Wetsuit and found himself completely dry. The guard smiled and showed him through to an elaborate factory producing Master Balls. He walked him through the factory and up some bare metal stairs. Lance remained silent as he left him in front of a door. Lance slowly pushed the door to reveal Steven and the Scuba Team sat down drinking Hot Cocoa.

"Lance! I thought you'd never come... God you look teerrible..." Steven let him sit down on his seat.

"Someone fired a missile at the Lighthouse with me and Jasmine inside" he picked up a cup od cocoa and scanned the room. No-one said anything. There was another door across the room and the light above it turned green. Someone must be coming in Lance thought. A tall man dressed in all blue walked calmly into the room He had a bandanna on with a skull and croos bones imprinted on it. He had a small bacl beard.

"Good evening and welcome to Aqua HQ..."


*COMING SOON*
Trecking in the mountains...
Soon they will unite!!!


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