Wow that was great too, easily said because of the great detail of the battle, as well as other interesting details within violet.
A few unclear thigs that could use some clearing up... How did the car's tire suddenly deflate and how would Jay's soda flip out and hit Max in the head?
Also, as for not deciding to put long chapters in.... that was actually pretty long compared to other fan fics and should be a chapter in itself.. good stuff
Oh and the protangonists lost... Just Like I wanted to see in your story
Theyve got themselves in a bit of a pickle now, interesting stuff is coming up, I cant wait... I also hope you write about the contest....