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Author:  bobashotmace [ Fri May 13, 2005 11:17 pm ]
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Okay, here's my story, this is unchecked but I usually do, I get good marks for writing, have gotten 1st, 2nd, and 3rd in a canada-wide story contest, and have been published in those anthologies, my award winning :) stories were published on the web too! I tend to keep my stories good, but thye do go a teeny bit violent sometimes, for example I was writing a story in school and the character dude had a steak knife in her bag, and it sorta stabbed her a few times :), no title, maybe later.

A metallic orb slowly drifted through the waves of time. Erik Morialis was waiting inside. He blankly stared out the window into a never ending sea of nothing. It was mind boggling. After a while he couldn't bear it anymore and leaned away from the window. He looked around at the tiled white floor and wandered over to his bed. It was just a matress on the floor, but still a bed.
Now more than ever he regretted entering the competition. It must have been weeks since he entered the timestream, but he had a feeling he would never get out. It hadn't always been this way though. How long had it been? He didn't know any more but he had been there for a long time. He was beginning to starve and was running out of water. He would die soon. It was all because of that competition...

2 MONTHS EARLIER

Andy happily ran down the sidewalk. He had been training for a month and knew he was ready. As a special competition anyone who thought they were good enough could enter a competition where they woud battle Salabra, the feirce leader of the Skulls gang.
The Skulls were weaklings, a minor neusance at their best, but the head was a true soldier. He had been born countless years befor their city had been founded and now was an experienced demon. Anyone who dared challenge him would find themself dead not even a minute after the battle began. But even with the guarantee of death entries still flooded in.
And handed an atendant aa brown envelope then walked tohe back of a lineup. He could hear screams of terror and pain coming from ahead, the line moved very quickly. The floor was hard rubber, it was greasy and something had been splled a little while before, Andy slipped and almsot met his demise before the fight. He walked up to the raised white rubber pad where the fights were happening.
For the first time he saw Salabra, he was a tall and powerful looking man, he had orange and yellow eyes, yellow teeth that looked like they belonged to a monster and lizard skin covering his body. A tough bald man walked up to Salabra ready to fight.
Before the bald man could even take a shot Salabra shot his hand forward and tightly clenched the mans neck, he then haised hime high into the air and whispered in a menacing voice, "did you really think you could beat me?" and with that he through the man into one of the buildings steel walls with alarming strength. The bald mand died instantly.
Now t was Andy's turn. He took a deep breath, gathering all the courage he could and raised his leather boots, one after another as he moved into the fighting pad.

And there you go! That isn't the whole story but that's the excerpt I use for these things.

Author:  dragonfan149 [ Sat May 14, 2005 6:20 am ]
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Wow it's great. 9.6/10

Author:  bobashotmace [ Sat May 14, 2005 7:38 am ]
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Sweet.

Author:  Halfbaked_ Bunny [ Sat May 14, 2005 12:20 pm ]
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It was weird, but so am I. 9.0/10.0

Author:  bobashotmace [ Sat May 14, 2005 12:41 pm ]
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sweet.

Author:  darkmagician2523 [ Sun May 15, 2005 12:30 pm ]
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good.i little strange,but good

7.5/10

Author:  bobashotmace [ Sun May 15, 2005 4:35 pm ]
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All my stories are a little strange. I have one that has SO many similarities to Dragonball GT, yet also so similar to Star Wars.

Author:  Undeadcutlet [ Fri May 20, 2005 8:57 pm ]
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Keep on writing! It's great! I'll give it 8/10... it's only that low because of some spelling and grammar errors

Author:  black_flygon [ Fri May 20, 2005 9:14 pm ]
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Halfbaked_ Bunny wrote:
It was weird, but so am I. 9.0/10.0


you cannot rate b-cos you ain't an official story rater


11/10 best out of you boba!!!

Author:  bobashotmace [ Fri May 20, 2005 9:40 pm ]
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huh. Wow, I'm getting awesome ratings, so,

sweet

Author:  Undeadcutlet [ Fri May 20, 2005 10:59 pm ]
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Boba, we all love your work so can't you just... I dunno... keep on writing? :D

Author:  bobashotmace [ Sat May 21, 2005 7:58 pm ]
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:D Well, II wil, but I need to finish warzone first, I've been working on that for years and I'm near the end of the climax, so, I've gotten

7.5
8
9.6
11

nice, so whats the average so far

about 8 or 9!

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