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Author: | Zapheres [ Sat Jun 28, 2008 2:22 am ] |
Post subject: | The Face of Earth (working title) |
One of the summer assignments for my English course next year is to write a good prologue from which we have a story planned out. This is what I came up with in the middle of the night, the working title for the story being "The Face of Earth." Hope you enjoy. =] ========== Prologue |
Author: | Diamond55000 [ Sat Jun 28, 2008 11:01 am ] |
Post subject: | Re: The Face of Earth (working title) |
I'm an absolute maniac when it comes to grammar/punctuation so this will be long, bear with me. Zapheres wrote: the freshly mown lawn stained with blood, the front door broken in half, also stained This could be better, you could add a little more description and change it to something like, '...the front door was broken in half, blood slowly dripped down the mahogany frame.' It |
Author: | Archangel Mikael [ Fri Jul 18, 2008 10:20 pm ] |
Post subject: | Re: The Face of Earth (working title) |
uhh... yeah... what he said. How ever I think this would make a good story, just ease up on the carnage, your going for a shock and awe effect and it doesn't suit you. but I incourage and dare you to build on this story |
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