Some of you may recognize the title, but that wasnt the full story! Im sure everyones dying to know if I actually get the Jade Jazzner fish or not, so Im writing this! FIrst the prolouge! EXITING!

The Prolouge!

This is the story of the Jade Jazzier fish. This fish is owned by the President! It all starts like this... SO I was at a professional league baseball game when the president called! "Mikey, we need you to protect the Jade Jazzier fish!" he said. "Don’t worry mar. President, Ill be there as soon as I can.! But first..." Mikey was up to bat, the tension was high, the bases were loaded, and If he got a home run, he would win the game! He was up to bat and picked his lucky limb (an old limb that had fallen off a tree, but he had carved into a bat. That’s what made him famous!)And swung! "Home run! Mikey Simon wins the game!"

I took the trophy and headed for the mach 7, a vehicle built by my father with 7 buttons on the steering wheel, each doing a different thing. There was my laser blaster, the jump, the speed boost, the underwater button, the mega saw, the radio, but most importantly, the horn! FUN! Anyway, I hopped into my mach 7 and sped toward the huge mansion with the roller coaster. I was there to pick up my good friend Bill Gates! He had funded many things I owned, like my car, my spot on the team, and had recently bought Nickelodeon and given it to me for my birthday. So I picked him up and we activated button 3, the speed booster! Just when we were about to make it, in came aliens! We were going to be vaporized, but Bill thought quick and activated...the horn? It scared them, but the laser blaster would have been the better choice...but at least the aliens were gone.

We went inside and tried to lay low, but the crowd wouldn’t let us. I was telling Miss Universe about the time I climbed Mount Everest blindfolded when in came a giant mutant lobster! It must have been 10, no 20, no 30 feet wide! It was coming for me! I pulled out a sword from the glass case above my head and attacked the mutant lobster! I would’ve won, had the lobster not used some ancient ninja magic...and I was thrust into an aquatic world...but I persevered! The lobster served as a fine main course over dinner, until another mutant lobster came! It said "You killed my brother!" and attacked! Then the lights went out! Then more ninjas appeared! I heard pikachu scream! I fought them all off, they were obviously after the fish, but why?

The ninjas were defeated, the lobsters made into lunch, and the day was saved! I ran to the bathroom to wash up but when I got back it was too late, the fish, I regret to say, was gone!

~to be continued...~

This isn’t supposed to be a tragedy or a romance or anything like that, I couldn’t do any better than most of the other people on this thread, so for now it's more of just a comedy to get people to ROLF, so if it didn’t get you to LOL, tell me and ill make the next one even funnier!

<font color="999999">Gee wiz!... hey, that "prolouge" was... weird, I cannot tell you if I like the story, since there is not any story, just a prologue!.

but anyways, if this is just all random... its okay, if not... okay and... well... what I can tell u about this is that... I don´t know what to say of this.

Edit: wee! another first-reply post to my pocket! *clunck*

Well, I certainly didn't roll on the floor; actually, I didn't laugh, I didn't really chuckle and I wonder if I even smiled.
For one, your grammar needs work. It's an important factor for both serious stories and comedic ones - or you might end up making people laugh for the wrong reason.

Also, don't push the humour so much... you don't have to make it ridiculous in order to make it funny... Take Leslie Nielsen for one: sometimes he's drop-dead funny, but when he tries to go too far, to make his movies too silly, it's disastrous... So while you do have the spirit and probably a decent plot in the making, try not to force your jokes. If all else fails, be sarcastic.

Im back with chapter one! all randmoness has been icluded!

Chapter One!

we left off as the jade jazzner fish had been stolen. We now follow Mikey Simon in his quest to catch the lobster ninjas and find the fish!

"Ok mr president, Im on my way." Mikey said as he hung up the phone. He had gotten a call from the president about finding a fish. "To the nuclear submarine!" He said. "Lets roll" said bill gates. They went deep underwater, but found out from a surfing pikachu that lobster ninjas dont live in water, they live in the secret base that says "NINJA LOBSTERS ARENT IN HERE!" wich they had passed. They hopped in the mach 7 and raced to the lobster madhouse. Mikey took down the ninjas, but the lobsters had escaped. They decided that finding the lobsters were of the utmost importance, then founsd out a new monster movie was out and saw that instead. Lobsters wee invading tokyo nd it was up to a mad scientis to save the day! they left off when the goat child and the scientist had entered the 13th floor of a hotel. They visited that hotel in tokyo and pressed all the buttons on the elevatoras a joke. They accidently activated the kill button and the water was up to thier necks and rising! just then, a huge button camre out marked, 13 and they pressed it. It took them to a mad scierntists lab and who should show? Why it was no other than Pikachu! They supersized pikachu and asked him to take the to thae lobsters. Instead, he told them the story. "One day I was at a party. The president had introduced his new Jade JAzzner fish and I was serving hot ramen. He asked me to go make lobsters, but I slipped and fell out the window, landing on the balcony. I looked for the lobsters, nut noticed all but one dissapear into the 13th floor. I chased after them, but all I did was give them ninjitsu skills, megafy them to WUMBO size and then made them, smarter. I was terrified and screamed as the lights went out. Id be happy to join you in your quest to find the lobsters though..."

to be continued.

I'm just a little lost on the storyline.....something about a pikachu? And there are quite a few spelling and grammar mistakes floating throughout the paragraph. Maybe this story would be better if you slowed it down a little, you obviously have a very creative mind, why not let your creative juices flow longer by taking time to fully describe to us the enviroment, expressions on people's faces, etc. I think that would make your story a lot better. but still, thats just my ideas, you don't need to take them.

They're good ideas so I think I will take them! The only reason I didnt low down here was because I'm writing a book(three actually)and they're always way too discriptive. Looks like I found two opposites and too them both to the extreme...oops.

The randomness almost made my head explode, and for that I applaud you. It's kind of funny in a strange way, but not something I would want to read more than once. Keep up the good random psycho stories!

if you want to make a good story, by my opinion, don't use millions of random things.

it can become confusing to the reader, like they were reading an epilogue before the prologue.